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Happy Birthday Angie II
Author: Daze_Earth
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(Added on Jul 15, 2012)
(This month 67390 readers) (Total 78357 readers) |
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Synopsis: Angela decides to take a few close friends out for dinner to a nearby restaurant for her birthday; however she finds herself alone at the table and is joined unexpectedly by Tamara. Lonely and betrayed by her friends, Angela is seduced by Tamara, goes back home with her and unwittingly strips down to her birthday suit. However, Angela finds a surprise awaiting her and the real party begins. After being paraded around naked, dressed in embarrassing clothing, covered in baby oil and enduring a night of ridicule, Angela gets fucked in her ass. The next day Angela discovers her true place in life. |
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
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Jul 24, 2012 |
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Happy Birthday Angie II was a fun story, as was Happy Birthday Angie. I have a hard time criticizing fun stories, and I hope I'm not to harsh, but I do have a few criticisms. Please slow down and let the reader enjoy the sex and humiliation your character is experiences, and I'd like to see more emotion in you characters as well. Some scenes moved fast and some slow, pacing is important. As for Angie, I wish you would have done more in the story to convince me that she was a submissive and wanted the treatment and to be owned. Even in the end, she seemed to hate her predicament, yet you would have me believe otherwise. If she's not, I think the police would have become involved. And as far as the ending, rushed again, as I would have liked to read the whole story about her first year as a slave and the erotic events that led to her friends sexually using her as well. Overall, I enjoy your stories and I hope you continue writing. Thanks for the effort. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
himannv
(Edit) (Jul 24, 2012)
- Thank you for the feedback and I noted the bit about the pace of the story. Will try and slow down for the next few stories a bit more if I can manage it.
About Angela's submissiveness, I did want the story to be NC and Reluctant as much as possible, so her submissive nature is implied and hinted here and there. I wanted her to have trouble accepting her submissive side and even though she secretly enjoys her humiliation, she does try and deny it. In short, I somewhat intended her behaviour to be that way.
Regarding your point about expanding on her first year of slavery, I did indeed consider it. However, I wanted the story to revolve around her birthday as much as possible so I just gave a bit of a summary of it in the end. I do like to write those sort of summaries to tantalize the readers and make them fill in the blanks a bit, although I accept that this technique may not be enjoyed by all.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story on the whole. Stay tuned for the next one where I'll definitely be looking to incorporate some of your feedback.
- Daze_Earth
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| Reviewer:
fitzgilbert
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Jul 18, 2012 |
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i like it (10/10)
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- Replied by:
himannv
(Edit) (Jul 24, 2012)
- Glad to hear it, and thank you for the feedback.
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