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Prisoners of the Empire
Author: granitethunder
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(Added on Mar 10, 2012)
(This month 100385 readers) (Total 120831 readers) |
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Soldiers of an army defeated by the Empire are taken to the Capital City, stripped, paraded for public display and taken to the Royal dungeons and torture chambers to receive the torments at the hands of the Empire. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
SamCurious
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Mar 21, 2012 |
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first chapter a bit vague and generalised. are you going to put more detail in future chapters? (6/10)
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wistan
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Mar 18, 2012 |
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Pretty decent idea and acceptable writing skills. Overall, a lot of potential here.
However, I think it could be greatly improved with a little attention. As it stands it's basically purely descriptive - it's all actions, along the lines of "the prisoners did this, but then that happened, and then this..." There's no dialogue, no real exploration of what the people on either side are thinking or feeling. You'd do well to name a few of the characters and tell the story from their point of view. (6/10)
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JUSTLERHET
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Mar 12, 2012 |
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I really enjoyed the story. After a while the story did not seem to goy anywhere. The short scenes of male torture were hot. However after a while there needed to be a little more plot. None the less. There are few stories of this nature on the site so i still rate this one high. (8/10)
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