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Author: Robin M
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(Added on Jan 28, 2012)
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Sarah is kidnapped, and to her horror has the same fate as Traci. A girl that disappeared months before hand. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
wild77er
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Feb 11, 2012 |
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Was a good start hope to catch the the chapter soon (7/10)
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Major Littmann
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Feb 3, 2012 |
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A good first attempt but the use of the present tense and strnge dialogue ruined it, two sentences from a polite introduction the master is clling her a bitch, hardly credible, surely the Master would have an upper class accent and not lapse into Ghetto Rap at the first opportunity, A good start but try again in the present tense and try to hear your characters as you write. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Jan 31, 2012 |
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Yes agree. Excellent start, now looking for what will come! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
coyote3k
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Jan 29, 2012 |
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It's a promising start. I hope the story continues! (8/10)
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