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Immersion
Author: GhostWriter
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(Added on Dec 31, 2011)
(This month 15274 readers) (Total 22299 readers) |
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When realities collide, what could be the end result? |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Alix
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Jan 7, 2012 |
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Well done GhostWriter a very clever story. Thanks for sharing it.
(8/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 1, 2012 |
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This clearly isn't the same "GhostWriter" I read other stories from in the past, because this one makes way too many spelling errors while the other one made none.
If you're unsure (or simply don't know) about the past tense of "to kneel" then you look it up instead of (mis)guessing a couple of times ("kneeled", "kneed" while "knelt" is how it's written).
There's lots of those in "Immersion", like, we're being... errr... immersed by them.
Must be the wrong time of the year, but I found the whole thing to be rather silly, with alternating views which absolutely don't work.
The five score I chop down is just because lower would be unfair towards the effort of the writer, but this to me is wastebasket material, I'm sad to say...
JJ (5/10)
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