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New Car - New Life Author: LJ66
(Added on Dec 7, 2011) (This month 52012 readers) (Total 63493 readers)
Brook´s car broke down.She is forced to change her young life to "earn" a new car.

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Reviewer: Michael247 (Edit) Rating: Dec 13, 2011
As Major Littmann said, the stilted conversation and poor punctuation are terribly distracting. I found the plot device used to get Brook into the original situation with Marcia to be contrived and incredibly weak, especially considering that it eventually became clear that the whole thing was a incestuous affair.
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That said, the sexual tension and pacing of the story was extremely well done, though I have to wonder why the fun at the party wasn't included. Up to that point the tension was palpable and increasing, then the story ended in a cliffhanger, with no climax. Very disappointing.
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Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (5/10)

Reviewer: Major Littmann (Edit) Rating: Dec 7, 2011
Another Brooke story but I'm afraid the stilted conversation and poor punctuation spoils this for me, as does the car problem, how would a blown radiator affect the transmission exactly. Those squares instead of "Quotes" are hugely ittitatng (7/10)
Replied by: Michael247 (Edit) (Dec 13, 2011)
I have emailed the webmaster of the BDSM Library TWICE concerning the html coding error that is misinterpreting "quotation marks" within the stories. No reply. Very distracting.

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