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Under Control
Author: Jact Tied
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(Added on Oct 9, 2011)
(This month 34458 readers) (Total 72000 readers) |
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A young man tries some self bondage, later to find himself being used by his neighbours as their new slave. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
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Apr 22, 2012 |
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I've read the first 3 parts & although the premise is good, the story is just to unrealistic & the details don't match. Could be much better if it was reworked, but a 10 year old Dom ruined the story!.....4/22/12: I've read part 1 & I'll review this part before reading part 2 & 3. I'm hoping part 2 & 3 are much better but since characters can't change, I'm not sure it's possible. I'll explain this buy saying its totally unbelievable that a 10 year old would act this way, be interested in any way or have any knowledge of bdsm, much less talk the way she talked. Gagged, but drinking cum & talking doesn't work either. Not to mention being tied up in a closet upstairs, but being able to hear footsteps at the front door, the door in another house open, voices next door, etc. The story premise is a good one, but the details need to be paid more attention to & the characters ages need to be more plausible. I'm giving part 1 a 5, but will increase the rating if the story improves & can overcome a 10 year old girl being a mistress. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
mooarg
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Oct 25, 2011 |
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great story, please keep it going =) (10/10)
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