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Heaven Sent Adoption Agency
Author: tiffany anyway short
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(Added on Oct 3, 2011)
(This month 37600 readers) (Total 64493 readers) |
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Now I know what you’re thinking this could not be about sex, bdsm, torture, nonconsensual, love and above all money. However there is so much more but you must read to find out more. |
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Average (?):  (3.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 8, 2011 |
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I can sense a certain passion from the author, but whatever the intention of Tiffany might have been, it all gets lost in the untidyness of the text.
Basically, what should be done is to keep a distinct line between the narration and the dialogues.
Now, there's no separation. The dialogues are an integral part of the musings from the author, making everything come across as very confusing -also because there's a serious lack in punctuation, like, the whole thing was written down in one long breath...
There is potential here, but some serious thinking, weeding and re-writing will be necessary...
JJ (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Cumpletecuntrol
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Oct 5, 2011 |
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Horrible writing. Poor grammar. Poor use of language. Uncreative references. Any sexual fantasy is lost in the horrible use of language and extremely poor descriptions. (1/10)
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