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| Reviewer:
Margosza
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Jul 2, 2012 |
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Excellent story! I especially loved the set-up and the first day of school. Though the infractions she keeps incurring has led to some great scenes (I won't give too much away)--and I'm looking forward to finding out more. I'm impressed with the way you have sustained the pacing over 27 chapters! That's a feat hard to achieve. 50 Shades has nothing on this! (10/10)
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Poppcorn
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Feb 24, 2012 |
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Wow love your story!!!!! Please hurry with the next chapter so so loving it!!!!!! Scale from 1-10 it is a 20+ (10/10)
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Martiniman
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Feb 8, 2012 |
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I love everything about this story. The premise, characters, setting & details are spectacular in this story. My only complaint is the way Sarah has just accepted everything, but I'm not talking about being a slut. It seems she's being treated unfairly compared to the other girls & I just think at some point she would snap & talk back or question her teachers...at least ask questions or have a meaningful conversation with a teacher. I can at least hear her scream at some point..."I'm trying"! Would like to see a little more of this type of emotion out of Sarah. With that said I am enjoying the story & the authors dedication to a long quality story. 20 chapters & we are only into her second day of classes...how long will this story be. Enough hints have been given & I'm wondering, is Sarah a lesbian? And if so, once she declares this, does she get special classes? So many exciting ways this story can go & I'm patiently waiting for more. (10/10)
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saskatchewanslut
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Jan 11, 2012 |
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I should start by saying that I love the highschool setting, that in itself is enough to get me reading, but this story quickly grabbed my imagination like no other school story has before. Setting the story in England was genius, you immediately get a feel for that stiff upper lip kind of schooling, where they are renowned for their love of uniforms and spanking. The whole fish out of water angle with having Sarah as American, and having her country of birth used as a tool against her, was perhaps the first thing that let me know this story was going to be different.
The characters are extremely well crafted, and this is a difficult thing to do with such an extended cast (all the other schoolgirls in Sarah’s class, teachers, staff, etc) but each one has their own flavor and it is a testament to the authors way with words that by one simple statement or action you can get a feel for the whole character and your imagination easily crafts its own picture. Sarah’s slow descent into her new life was so beautifully done that I found myself rereading the first few chapters even when I knew there were some twenty more still to go (and that is so far). I find it incredibly satisfying to find a story that doesn’t end almost before it has begun. The chapters here are sometimes longer than entire stories posted and while some may see this as a detraction, I cannot get enough. I hope there are a hundred more chapters to come.
There are certain scenes here that even now weeks later, I cannot get out of my head. I find myself replaying them over and over. There is a common theme throughout the authors work dealing mainly with the main characters and certain idioscynracies that are apparent to even those who are not particularly keen of eye, specifically the thick cream each girl produces during arousal. It is easy to see that something in the author’s past made an impression. Each story is different, and the characters are so very well suited to each story, that while there are certain stylistic similarities each character is completely different.
It is a testament to the way the author writes that each protagonist is unique, even while sharing some physical similarities. With this and another of the authors stories he has taken well used tropes and done something different, while avoiding the clichés that plague bdsm writing. There are some here but even when they appear they are somehow turned about and feel fresh and different. Sarah’s acceptance of her new life was rapid but I found that to form a great part of her charm. She really is one of my favorite characters of any of the stories I have read. We really do get a glimpse into her thought processes, something that the vast majority of stories either marginalize or omit entirely.
I greatly enjoyed the pace of the story, the slow buildup allowing us to get to know the characters. I will be intrigued to see how the story progresses. With near 30 chapters done we are nearing the end of what can safely be described as the introduction to the school day. The level of detail cannot continue and I am interested to see how the author deals with it and how he deals with the digression of paths that must occur as the girls move further into their training. There is potential for the story to fragment and become convoluted or become bogged down but from the evidence so far, I am happy to put my faith in the author. This is truly one of the best stories I have read, for me an instant classic.
(10/10)
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GaryE
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Jan 6, 2012 |
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Just a great story. I admit that the whole school days training kind of thing is a huge kink for me so I might be more than a little biased but it is a very well written story with great characters who are very well developed. It really is an excellent story which is well written.
If I had a criticism there are a few typos but I have seen and reviewed published books selling at full price which had far more errors so it is nothing that a good editor (other than the author) could take care of. (10/10)
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fg4j
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Dec 4, 2011 |
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keep going (10/10)
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torrid girl
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Dec 1, 2011 |
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You write beautifully. Wonderful premise. Thank you for posting this! I look forward to more chapters. (10/10)
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Garmonbozia
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2011)
- Thanks for the review. Thought I would pop the link to my blog up here as there is a lot more material there, and it is updated more often than the library: http://lazerou.blogspot.com/
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Alix
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Dec 1, 2011 |
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Nice story and am looking foward to more. 9 (9/10)
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littleone__
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Nov 30, 2011 |
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and now my rating, and please look at my comments in my reply to grinner666. My only constructive comment is it could move a bit faster. Mr. Gramonbozia, thank you for a fun to read story. (10/10)
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grinner666
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Nov 25, 2011 |
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This is an excdellent story so far. Character development is top notch, the story grabbed and held my attention, and the questions raised by the story (What is her stepfather's obviously nefarious purpose in sending her here? Who is her "patron" to be?) are far more titillating than annoying. Sarah's domination by everybody around her is very well handled and very hot. Makes me wonder what's going to happen when (if) she decides to rebel.
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Just two criticisms. First, the author might want to pick up the pace just a bit. Poor Sarah's been with us for three chapters now and it seems she's barely experienced a couple of hours in the story. While the level of detail is awesome and one of the things that's keeping me reading, I keep asing myself ... when is there going to be some ACTION?
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Second, there is a very fine line between "charmingly innocent" and "too stupidly ignorant to be allowed to live." Young Sarah has already tripped over this line a couple of times (in four-inch heels, no less!) Make sure she doesn't spend too much time on the STUPID side of that line.
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I look forward to further submissions. So far, you've got a real winner here. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
grinner666
(Edit) (Nov 25, 2011)
- I've dropped my rating of this story from a 9 to a 7 because ... well, first because I agree with Curtis; as the story becomes hotter it also becomes less believable. But also because every character in the story has proven herself to be a complete moron. Every. Single. One ... teachers, students, all of them.
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First, the instructors (I won't dignify them by calling them "teachers"). The instructors spend a great deal of the early part of the story explaining how the students MUST NOT let the school's "regular" student body know how they are being trained. They claim to be expert not only in training "sluts," but also in keeping their illegal activities a secret. THEN in Chapters 11 and 12 they have Mitchell wandering around the school topless, her teats freshly caned. THAT certainly isn't going to cause any talk about just what kind of "training" these girls are receiving, will it? Again: dumb as a box o' rocks.
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Now let's talk about the moron Trinity students. We can skip over Sarah herself, as she's obviously not as clever as she's always thought, and Mitchell, who is obviously kind of stupid. But hasn't ANY of the OTHER SIXTEEN girls in this clown parade considered that in EVERY class they outnumber their "teacher" 18-to-1? Has nobody even considered that a single teacher would quickly become a single VICTIM if they just worked together and decided to take her down? Or that, if the school had to call in the authorities or if even ONE of them managed to escape to someplace outside the local jurisdiction (we'd have to assume the local cops are on the take), the school would quickly be brought down? Or that taking the headmistress or even one of the teachers hostage would likely have the same effect, once the cops came in and found them all with steel collars around their necks and boxes full of dildos in their classrooms? MORONS! And let's not forget that these "professionals" who are training them have made the same stupid mistake. Slavery IS illegal in every civilized country in the world, and these girls could and should be trying to use that, at least when they've been abducted by such obvious and utter MORONS.
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Personally, I think the author has either not thought this story through, or he's trying to "prove" his thesis about women being natural sluts and servants, which is nonsense on its face. Sarah may have fallen for this nonsense, may even be a natural "slut." That doesn't mean every woman or girl is, by any means, and it's a silly premise for a story. The "security" (if you can call it that) is swiss cheese, with enough holes in it to drive a truck through. These eighteen chicks should just walk through some of them and put this story out of its misery.
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littleone__
(Edit) (Nov 30, 2011)
- One more thing, please. About the students out numbering the teacher and the students staging a revolt and taking over. First have you head of the Stanford experiment were students took on the rolls of prisoners and guards. If not check it out. It shows why that reaction is improbable. Then there is also the Stolockholm syndrome. And finally I’m sure grinner666 has never been a middle-teens to younger teenage girl and simply can’t imagine the fear they would be feeling that situation.
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littleone__
(Edit) (Nov 30, 2011)
- Dear grinner666
Reference you comments, yes in the real world it could not work that way but story is fiction and there is something calls, "Suspension of disbelief". I think perhaps you expect a true to life story. Wouldn't that make most stories boring?
For example there is no man with a red S on chest from another planet and if he did exist I am sure he would end up dominating the earth. People can not move around in time as is the idea of so many stories. People can't drive through NYC shooting up the town and not end up in jail. Why would the government want the Impossible Mission Force when they have navy seals, the CIA, etc. Jackie Chan's character could not beat up on dozens of men at the same time. Should we go point by point through "Kill Bill" and discuss why none of that would really happen in real life. The lone Ranger isn't real, Captain Jack Sparrow isn't real and a blond ditz was very admitted to Harvard law school.
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grinner666
(Edit) (Dec 1, 2011)
- There is a HUGE difference between suspending your belief and having to LEVITATE IT ...
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Garmonbozia
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2011)
- You may as well go ahead and rate the story a 1 because if you are here looking for non-fiction then you won't be happy. I'll stick to writing an outrageous fantasy and you can pop off and read The Perfect Victim or something.
On the plus side, at least it's a passionate response :)
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popandlock
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2011)
- Its funny you mention that book because there are things in it that are so much more unbeilievable and it is real life. She was a slave for 7 years and in a box and was let go back to her family to visit and everything. I think when things like that really happen in real life if someone worries about things in a story being unbeilievable then they are a bit of a spaz. I hope you keep up the great work becase you cant make everyone happy but please keep writing for us who you do.
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littleone__
(Edit) (Dec 18, 2011)
- One more point regarding guinner666's inseresting comments; if he/she thinks there is no slavery in first world countries and that it is not rampant in 3rd world counties please read the United Nations Report on Human Trafficking. That is as real as it gets and it is appalling to say the least. I hope the people who are conducting that kind of thing are burned to death.
I am not suggesting that concept be used for a story I am only pointing out an error in guionner666's argumentation. I do say I love his/her passion and he/she should be commanded for sparking this interesting conversation.
(PS: I'm a she :)
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dadisch
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Nov 23, 2011 |
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I am really enjoying this story. I love the idea that Sarah is so nieve & innocent but at the same time is learning fast & indeed enjoying what is happening to her as she learnds how her body is responding. I can't wait for further chapters. (10/10)
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drayman
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Nov 4, 2011 |
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This is one of the most well written stories on this site and the author rivals Obohobo as one of my favourites. The tale of Sarah is brilliantly constructed and the author gets inside the mind of the girl so well that the reader really experiences the girl's foreboding at her future. I am really looking forward to reading the rest of the story (10/10)
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Curtis
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Oct 28, 2011 |
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Interesting that Casta has a pretty good idea, and none of the other girls do. (end of chapter five) I really like the characterization, but Sarah seems awfully naive. Maybe that's why she was selected? More biddable and cooperative than a 'knowing' girl. Casta doesn't count, cause she's actually looking forward to it � my guess, anyway. This story could've used a 'slow' code.
…and with Chapter Seven we have liftoff! I dropped my rating from 9 to 8 because, although the situation has become a LOT hotter, it's also become less believable. (8/10)
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Garmonbozia
(Edit) (Nov 4, 2011)
- It is odd that I find myself drawn to comment on this review, because I do not wish to appear critical of anyone who writes a review of any story - I see reviews more for other readers than the author - but I find myself compelled.
Suspension of disbelief is important in most any story, but more so in the majority of BDSM, because we are dealing with fantasies, ones which we all know will never be real (could never be real), but it is the fantastic that draws us to them. The very premise of much BDSM erotica is outlandish and ridiculous. The story is what it is.
My favourite BDSM stories are utterly ludicrous in premise, but it is the premise I buy into when reading the story. Just my perspective, but thanks for taking the time to review. I just wanted to share my thoughts on the genre that your review prompted.
I can dance, I just choose not to.
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Curtis
(Edit) (Dec 10, 2011)
- Hello, Garmanbozia. Thank you for your thoughtful response. I was trying to explain my downgrading of the rating (which a reviewer a few places above did a much better job of than I did), not tell you your business. "You can't please everyone, so you have to please yourself." The only caveat I have to your suspension of disbelieve is that personally I find it more difficult to believe in a world where people's minds work differently than in worlds where physics works differently. Apparently you find the situation reversed. Fair enough.
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JimmyJump
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Oct 8, 2011 |
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In comparsion to "Pentonbridge Pig" and "My Very Own" this is more of the same.
On the one hand, this is normal, as an author tends to re-use things he likes himself, but, on the other hand, saying such a thing is unfair.
Unfair, because in the case of "Sarah Porter's Schooldays" more of the same is exactly the opposite -or at least, the result is the opposite.
Meaning that Garmonbozia is able to sluise-in certain things he has used before in such a way that they not only form an integral part of the narrative, but one doesn't immediately realise it has been used before.
The overall feel I got with "SPS" is that of those Victorian era erotic novels -like "Béatrice" or "Frau Mina", because "SPS" breathes this sumptuousness of frilly frocs and directoires, ruffling against a background of vast, echoing school halls and freshly waxed wooden floors, all this under the scrutenizing eye of an unflexible teacher flexing her riding crop...
The subject itself is executed to a tee -and while some may feel that Sarah comes across as rather dumb, I personally feel that her musings fit her untainted character and that some of her reactions are quite the logical exponent of her upbringing.
Plus, an environment can do funny things to people, sometimes.
Another little marvel.
JJ (10/10)
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davine
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Oct 6, 2011 |
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excelent. I keep putting myself in her place. surely a good sign.beautifully paced story that has me lusting for more. (9/10)
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popandlock
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Sep 16, 2011 |
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I love this story. I love the whole fish out of water thing with Sarah being american and popped into a stiff British schools. The uniform is delicious, such a great mix of the proper and the sexy. So much detail and so well constructed, i literally cant wait for more. The anticipation i always feel reading your stories is just amazing. But you know the funny thing is that I love the little things. I even love the names that you choose :) They just all feel so right, I dont know if that makes much sense though. The chapters are named kind of different in this one, I would like to know about that. (10/10)
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CarolinaSpanker
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Sep 16, 2011 |
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A thorough OBGYN Exam most lkely would have included a very humiliating anal exam. I hope we see a wooden paddle used on her bare bottom to remind her of America. Enjoying the read and will look to peruse more as it is posted. (7/10)
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sylvia_ber
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Sep 14, 2011 |
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One of the best stories I have read here so far. I would love to read more of it. (10/10)
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patient718
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Sep 13, 2011 |
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I have very much enjoyed reading the first 3 chapters and am looking forward reading more of this story. Very good character development thus far and really like the mental and verbal domination of Sarah by everyone. Can't wait to see what happens to her as far as sexual humiliation is concerned as I sense the story is going in that direction. (10/10)
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thedominthehat
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Sep 13, 2011 |
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A very good start. I look forward to the rest of the story. (10/10)
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ChrissieLecker
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Sep 13, 2011 |
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A wonderful setup with well drawn characters. I'll be keeping on the lookout for new chapters. A small suggestion: you should really add story codes, I know that a lot of readers decide which stories to read by looking at those. (10/10)
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Garmonbozia
(Edit) (Nov 9, 2011)
- Thanks Chrissie. Not entirely sure what happened with this submission - it was added last month actually and with story codes so... If you want to check out my blog (http://lazerou.blogspot.com) there's more and more regular updates. I'll try to get them in on the next update.
Tried four times now to get codes added. Not going to waste any more time on trying to get things done here.
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explwr
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Sep 10, 2011 |
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Fine start
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- Replied by:
slave2woman
(Edit) (Sep 13, 2011)
- can't wait to read more
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