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Bar None
Author: torrid girl
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(Added on Sep 1, 2011)
(This month 14111 readers) (Total 25421 readers) |
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Luscious Red headed wife instructed to take a bar full of bikers. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
kemosabe
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Sep 7, 2011 |
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Another Grade A submission from a newbie. Aside from no indication of the motivation of our protagonist, the action is tense. Not as good as her others but well worth while. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
torrid girl
(Edit) (Sep 11, 2011)
- thanks kemosabe :) This one was a quickie, you're right, I don't like it as much as the others. Do you think it would be better if I had explained HOW those two found themselves at that bar then?
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