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The Story of Julie
Author: Master M
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(Added on Jun 11, 2011)
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This ficticious story is based on a slaves situation with her master. There is feedback written from the slaves point of view as well. enjoy! |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
SamCurious
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Jul 3, 2011 |
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the story, while interesting, would have benefited from shorter paragraphs and more spacing. the full on text is hard to read. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
starglitter
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Jun 23, 2011 |
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Absolutely awesome! Never a dull or boring moment. Back to back action. Well well done! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
sammy_808
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Jun 13, 2011 |
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i agree with the other review that it really does need editing. without clear paragraphs, the point of view switching was very hard to follow. however, i did read the entire thing, and loved the ideas behind it. i would love to see more of this kind of story. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
teleya
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Jun 13, 2011 |
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I'm pretty sure this would be more like an 8 or perhaps even a 9 if i could have read past the first 1000 words. But lack of paragraphs makes it too difficult to focus. I suggest you take five minutes and re-edit it and than resubmit it. (6/10)
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