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It's a business...
Author: Ash Clark
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(Added on May 30, 2011)
(This month 37586 readers) (Total 42565 readers) |
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Young Samantha wakes up in a strange, surreal room, not knowing where she is, or what's happening. She is "modified" to suit her buyer. Part 1, to be continued (currently 2600 words). |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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Sirgregor261
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Aug 15, 2011 |
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The structure of the store made it a little difficult to follow but the store line was very exciting.
Hope to be reading more sone. (8/10)
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Snark
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Jun 8, 2011 |
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Enjoyable! Well written, could use a bit of proofing and editing...but not terrible. I rated it 8 with expectation of more and better. She would have to have far more emotional response than has been described; while the clinical setting is fine, tension from her emotions is needed to ramp up the impact. But nicely done so far. (8/10)
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Dryhill
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Jun 7, 2011 |
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This was a quite a good opening chapter, told in a very clinical manner. While the clinical style is correct for most of the story we are lacking her feelings and emotions. Surely she would be scared as to what is going to happen to her, yet she only once queries being owned.
i look forward to reading the next installment and hopefully i will be able to increase my rating. (5/10)
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explwr
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Jun 4, 2011 |
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Great start! (9/10)
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subalo
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Jun 3, 2011 |
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Good start so far. look forward to more (7/10)
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