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The savage
Author: Aibo
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(Added on Apr 26, 2011)
(This month 113703 readers) (Total 160898 readers) |
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After a severe ordeal of body modification a female awakens and find herself in a dungeon. Yet the real terror is only about to start. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (9/10) |
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Rating:  (3/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
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Feb 17, 2012 |
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Thank you, Aibo, for replying. And, yes, I see the light after reading the new chapter posted on 2/17. The twist was an interesting one to say the least. Deserving of an increase in rating I do believe.
I'm enjoying this story...up to a point. It now seems that this story is a listing of odd tortures. Is there someplace you are taking this story? Or will you continue adding torture chapters until you run out of ideas. I would love to see some depth & better emotion added in upcoming chapters. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Aibo
(Edit) (Jan 31, 2012)
- Thank you, nice to hear from one who like my effort.
So yes it is getting a bit fragmentary, isn't it? There's a very specific reason for that. Next update will give the answer.
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Dec 31, 2011 |
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There's indeed quite a lot of spelling and syntax mistakes, obviously because the author hasn't English as primary language, but the errors aren't of such a dimension that the story is unreadable.
On the contrary.
Saying that the tale is just a summation of tattoos and/or piercings isn't right either -maybe some reviewers should come back now that chapters are added.
I would have gone for an eight score, but the errors took away some of the reading pleasure, so I'll stick with seven. Then again, I'll add that point to even out on what I consider unfair scores.
I also must add that Aibo's English got better with each added chapter...
JJ (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
bullfinch
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Dec 2, 2011 |
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The torture is well described. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 15, 2011 |
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part 1:
i have rated this piece of writing a three instead of a one because i believe Aibo generally does put a lot of thought into his stories (i have read all his submissions on this site). It is clear that Aibo's first language is not English so why publish this story in English or at least get someone to proof read it first.
i am afraid that Mr. Willit has completly spoilt the story by letting everyone know the story is just a description of tattoos and piercings .... oops i have done the same. Oh well it saves anyone wasting their time by reading this story.
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Sorry the poor spelling and usage of English has put me off so i will not be coming back for any more of this story. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Modified Prisoner uk
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May 10, 2011 |
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I liked this story, and believe you guys should all rate higher (if you wish to read more). Personaly I look forward to reading what happens to her when her "roleplay" really begins! I'd like to see her oiled, wrapped in plastic, and modified further into a true Sex Sacrifice! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
SamCurious
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May 3, 2011 |
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Chilling... minor mis-spellings and omissions here and there, but they don't detract from the promise of this opening chapter. I look forward to your next update. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mr. Willit
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Apr 30, 2011 |
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I'm tempted to give partial credit since english is obviously not your first language, but that's not the only issue with the story. Nothing actually happens in it. It's mostly (from what I could read), a description of tatoos and piercings. I guess that's a story, maybe? (3/10)
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