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The Sum of Her Parts
Author: Perry
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(Added on Mar 16, 2011)
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An attractive woman is blackmailed into a world or servitude and heavy modification. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
pharma
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Apr 14, 2016 |
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Very good uterus torture! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Sirgregor261
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Sep 7, 2011 |
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Enough said by the others about the story structure.
hope to read more! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
SamCurious
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May 3, 2011 |
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Good, although chilling, premise. However, Part 2 has obviously been rushed in your enthusiasm to get it uploaded. It is full of typos and general spelling errors. When you write something, sleep on it overnight and come back to it refreshed - edit and refine, doublecheck spellings and actually READ what you have written. Don't rush it. (5/10)
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Snark
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Apr 28, 2011 |
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The author has a twisted imagination; the one thing going for him. The level six rating requires acceptable writing skills. One required skill is spelling. Another is grammar. Yet another is editing. None of these is evident in this story. Very few word processing programs lack spell check. I suggest that it be used. Proof reading before submitting is another suggestion. The story rambles without direction. Suspending disbelief is impossible here, though I tried. The story concept has potential but it is hidden by the writing flaws. (5/10)
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JimmyJump
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Apr 26, 2011 |
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I on the one hand must applaud Perry for his effort and willingness to bring us a good story, but on the other hand must say that "The Sum Of Her Parts" is rather poorly written...
The story doesn't make much sense either, but that often doesn't matter in this kind of tale, where the emphasis isn't so much on bringing a story, but more so about the torments inflicted upon the victim.
Perry has anough imagination, but the transfer from mind to paper is a tad forced and lacking in detail.
There's too many things which are brought to our attention -and which are very interesting- but which the author doesn't act upon.
For example, when Molly is walked through the castle-like gates for the first time, the author informs us that Molly pees herself. But instead of giving us an emotion or some kind of reaction, it stays with just this short comment.
Peeing takes 15 to 20 seconds, which means around 8 to 12 paces, leaving a trail of about 35 feet. But nobody seems to notice that molly is peeing herself...
Then there's the descriptions of what's being done to Molly. Imaginative, yes. Well, sort of, because Perry has me (us?) very confused over what exactly is being done, or how some of the apertures work...
The outcome is very clear though, but again there's not enough explanations.
All in all, I feel that "The Sum Of Her Parts" is a decent effort which nevertheless is all over the place thanks to the author missing the beat on too many occasions.
Rushed and too many thoughts which got stuck inside the author's head are what make this tale more of a shambles than a "decent" telling...
JJ (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
MarginallyTruePig
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Mar 26, 2011 |
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Nice story with extremely powerful fetishes. (8/10)
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dog_man
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Mar 23, 2011 |
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I'd love to see more....maybe you can have additional characters come in to do 'reenactments' of historical scenes, what they don't know is that the scenes like of an unmarried mom, her baby and the mom's teenage sister are having a medieval trial and punishment for adultery and having a child out of wedlock being reenacted for real, complete with the interrogations in the dungeon and the use of the breast ripper in the public square. (9/10)
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matrixmodels
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Mar 23, 2011 |
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Amazing story. Can't wait for Part II (10/10)
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SirTrigger
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Mar 22, 2011 |
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Inventive and unique in it's own brand of powerful fetishes. (10/10)
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