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Emily and Oliver
Author: the darkness
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(Added on Dec 1, 2010)
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A lyrically macabre tale of incestuous bestiality in which a poor father laments his wife's loss and worries about how best to raise his daughter. It's a slow-burner with a big explosion. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Snark
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Dec 4, 2010 |
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Compelling. Imaginative. Emotional. All adjectives that come to mind about this story. Very well written, very well edited. The writer describes the depth of a man's love in a way that finds a parallel in my own for my wife. Perhaps too much...The transformation is a new twist. Is it a surrogate to enable latent desires to erupt? Or a mind crumbling from the decay of grief? Guilt manifest in self destruction? But Oliver pays the price. (9/10)
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Can't add much to what nominalista and, especially, Michael Alexander have said. Except that 'Oliver' was probably chosen as a name for the dawg with regard to the Charles Dickens "Oliver Twist" novel -- and that there are indeed a few silly spelling errors/mistakes.
My take on this story is that the father is slowly but surely becoming mad, swapping identities in some kind of delirium, not even being sure at times if he's dealing with his daughter or his defunct wife; if indeed the wife is dead. The extrapolation of his own psyche to that of the dog could have to do with the father wanting to get away with it by not performing some sexual acts himself, but letting the dog do the business, so to speak. Or something like that.
The reason why I don't go for a double digit is because I felt the story was too much a mainstream tale about loss and love, with some sexual innuendo added.
The style and prose is exemplary, yes, but the whole is at odds with itself a lot of the time, just because of the clash between civility and hardcore porn.
Another reason why I stop at nine, is because of the 'depth of emotion' Michael also mentions. I like my erotica well written, sure, but not to the point I start sniveling and need my hanky for purposes hithertho unforseen...
Besides, the confusedness of the father and his mesmerizing musings are too strong, too well portrayed, making it hard to look past his character and enjoy the shenanigans that ensue, because the reader --or at least, me-- is too pre-occupied with the alarming way dad's thoughts derail.
JJ (9/10)
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nominalista
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A spectacular story, short and to the point. The change in the point of view, a critical point of any transformation story, is very well managed. And the inner voice speaks with a very truthful accent. Brilliant. (9/10)
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Michael247
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Dec 3, 2010 |
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I ripped through this one. Fast.
*** First of all, let me say, wow. Talk about a fuck... a mind fuck. Say that really deep and really slow and you've got a pretty good idea of what "Emily and Oliver" really is. In this story we get a first person narrative of a father, who is lucid and yet emotional about the loss of his wife and burgeoning confusion he experiences as he replaces his lost spouse with his growing daughter. There are only hints of sexual desire, and he locks them tight in his heart, only to have the most frightening yet intriguing experience.
*** From a grammatical perspective, "Emily and Olver" was written very well. I didn't notice any glaring errors while I was reading and the sentence construction was complex, adding depth and sensation to the overall story. This is the hallmark of a good writer. Adjectives and words weren't used over and over, and there weren't any run on sentences or awkward or misplaced modifiers.
*** What is truly amazing about this story however, is the depth of emotion described by the narrator (not the author), in which he establishes the relationship between Emily and himself. Oliver, the dog is introduced in one of these moments and here is where the author seriously excels. Rather than creating separate scenes to help both plot points along (father-daughter relationship and the introduction of the dog), he does them both together, turning what some authors would have made just a standard blah blah blah plot point into an emotional father daughter moment just like the "spinning in the wind" scene. It was touching.
*** Now I admit, little Emily has some... intriguing sexual interests, but since I happen to know someone who is (somewhat) into a similar type activity, I can accept it. I just can't help feeling a little icked out that Emily choose Oliver for that purpose. I suppose I would have liked to know if it led up to that, or whether Oliver was getting nookie from day one. On the flip side, this... disparity practically shocks you, even if you HAVE read the codes the author provided. It just... seems so unreal.
*** What is also truly innovative is the perspective the narrator takes. I'm trying not to give away spoilers here, just in case someone reads the review before the story, but the "big explosion" and amazing plot twist at the end leaves you wondering WTF! And being pleasantly happy.
*** And worried. The end of the story leaves you wondering about just a few things. What is Emily going to think about daddy? Does Daddy ever get his body back? How did the switch happen in the first place? Will Emily run off with Oliver and live in frightened yet sexual bliss? Oh...so many questions.
*** In summary this was a phenomenal story that excelled on a number of levels. An excellent story. Thank you.
*** Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander (www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (9/10)
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