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Thunder, Ben and Eddy
Author: BZ
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(Added on Mar 29, 2002)
(This month 30813 readers) (Total 59181 readers) |
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Office bitch rebuffes Junior V.P. Eddy. Eddy elists the aid of his brother to transform office bitch to bitch pet. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 18, 2009 |
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Only problems I have are the way the scene is set and the distortion between who are the good and the bad guys here.
Screwing-up a woman's life just because you don't "get anywhere with her on a personal level" must be the thinnest plotline ever conceived, or at least the most meager incentive for doing what the brothers do.
I would have dropped the "office bitch" background and simply introduced the two brothers as a mad scientists with an agenda.
Anyway, I liked the rest of the story, so there you go.
JJ (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 16, 2004 |
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a real gem, keeper what ever you want to call it,
great job (10/10)
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teamster
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Apr 8, 2004 |
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Although the story was a little short on actual sex action, it was well constructed and thought out. I\'m sure we\'ve all known a Beverly at one time or another and experienced a similar desire for revenge. Woof woof. Personally, I think that drugs such as cocaine and ecstasy make a more effective tool for inducing arousal than electrodes, but to each his own. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
bcsollte
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2004)
- Hi teamster
Glad you liked the story Sandy (aka Beverly) may show up in a future story, I have some ideas as to what should happen to her once she arrives in her new home.
BZ
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| Reviewer:
agp_millie
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Sep 25, 2003 |
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Brilliant, more please (10/10)
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- Replied by:
agp_millie
(Edit) (Dec 28, 2003)
- Read again, BZ and made me soak TWO towels as i read from start to end.
Let me know when You have a followup story, especially if it involves a cow called millie (smile)
XXXX 10+/10
- Replied by:
bcsollte
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2004)
- Hi agp millie
I haven't been able to write for a while. But Sandy may appear in a future story, but not as a cow. Although that is a subject theme I may delve into soon.
BZ
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