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Worlds Apart
Author: w.l. telford
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(Added on May 9, 2010)
(This month 201288 readers) (Total 279931 readers) |
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Business took him to Asia. His wife stayed home. And was lost. More than either of them could ever have imagined. |
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Average (?):  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
gigiatexaslady
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Jan 11, 2012 |
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Great story, not what I expected for an ending. New to this site. Read the entire story in one sitting. Off to read more of your stories. (10/10)
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thetrudruid
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Oct 1, 2011 |
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Fantastic Story, well written and interesting if a little unorganized in places, I too want to know what happens to carol in wonderland but i enjoy imagining just as much. (9/10)
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Snark
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Jan 17, 2011 |
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This is either my third or fourth review of this story; crashes happen.
"World's Apart" is best BDSM story I've read on this or any other site; by the best author on this or any other site I have read.
His scenarios are almost sparse, yet stark with the impact of a large ball peen hammer. This story, along with "Virtual Slavery" have had the greatest personal impact of any stories I have read in many decades. The tension created between the cuckolded husband and his vulnerable wife by a controlling interloper sets up a dynamic that is impossible to ignore or stop reading. Vibrant word pictures, clever plot progression, characters that are actually too real. Spectacular is insufficient to describe this story. If I could rate it a 12 (maybe a 20), I would. (10/10)
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janmayen
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Dec 30, 2010 |
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My original comment was erased when the site went down.
Excellent story. I loved how Carol accpeted submission and prostitution and after a brief struggle even gave in to bestiality.
My favorite subject on this site is (forced) prostitution and even though this was only briefly mentioned this story is even better than The story of O in my eyes.
I hope w.l.telford will follow Carol through the door.
Anyway thank you very much for a really great story! (10/10)
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Curtis
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Dec 16, 2010 |
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A masterpiece. The only nit I have to pick is strictly one of taste, and that is that I really didn't like the centered text. There's a reason why left-justified margins have become standard in the Western world, and this story demonstrates it superbly. Other than that stylistic note, I can find nothing here to complain about. Specifically, I'm going to commend you on the ending. Very powerful, and thank you for not following her through that last door. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
wltedford
(Edit) (Dec 17, 2010)
- Thanks for taking the time to write. Naturally I'm glad you have enjoyed the story. I may follow Carol though that door, but if so, not for a while.
I don't like centered text either. For reasons that I do not understand and that are beyond my control, this site's software changes my formatting. This is even more of a problem with VIRTUAL SLAVERY, which doesn't even have paragraphs, although I have submitted it in Plain Text, RTF, and PDF. Understories.com does not have this problem and you can find my stories normally formatted there.
- Replied by:
Sador
(Edit) (Dec 25, 2010)
- wltedford said:
"I may follow Carol though that door, but if so, not for a while."
I'm glad to hear that. Merry Christmas!
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Sador
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Dec 7, 2010 |
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Carol Edwards is a special character in the realm of erotica. Yes, she's a submissive, masochismtic slut like countless others, but unlike all the others, she pursues her lifestyle not to run away from herself, but to escape the hypocricy of all those whose promises of absolute love are compromised by career ambitions and sexual hipocrisy. Ross and her parents hide critical flaws behind a facade of respectability which make their failings far less flattering than Carol's pure and unrepentant masochism. She is
the strongest and most principled submissive, masochistic slut ever.
This is the finest story of its kind I've ever read, written with uncommon subtlety and artistry. I.E. I loved the contrast made in 37 between the brightness of the day and the darkness of what Brad had to say. This is a story for the ages.
Chapter 49 reminded me of the end scene of the movie "Camille 2000," the camera panning over empty halls and empty rooms while a man's voice calls out again and again.
On Understories, "Worlds Apart" ended with "More to come." Much more, I hope. Carol deserves unlimited installments, lol.
(10/10)
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yrmasta
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Nov 15, 2010 |
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Excellent development and descriptions. Great story (10/10)
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Otherrealm
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Oct 24, 2010 |
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Excellent work. Enjoyable, moves well, the husband and wife exploration is well done but not overdone - I do enjoy the semi-willing corruption of wives! One of the better stories I have read. (9/10)
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Misschief
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Oct 17, 2010 |
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The writing was eloquent, and the plot was thoroughly arousing. I am hoping to see chapter 10 at some point very soon.. (10/10)
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H Dean
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Oct 14, 2010 |
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I meant to review this story some time back but, much to my chagrin, I forgot. Blame old age...olde age. Heh.
This is a pretty well told tale - erotic and a bit of a yanker. Portions of the plot bothered me but that is mostly due to my own personal preferences. Aside from the odd eagerness that his wife embraces her "situation" there are few things to complain about in this little tale. Gee, that's the worst I can say and it's all good. (9/10)
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sextroll
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Oct 14, 2010 |
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This is a great story with a very real plot line that seems mildly plausible. I like that you open up very quickly and slow it down so that we feel almost what Carol feels as she waits for calls and agonizes with anticipation over what might come next. The only reason I didn't give this a ten was the large number of spelling and grammar mistakes. Other than those I think this is one of the best stories I have read on this site! Looking forward to seeing how you finish it up! (9/10)
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wltedford
(Edit) (Oct 14, 2010)
- I read this review with interest and some confusion, until it occurred to me that perhaps the reviewer has not realized that certain words and usages in dialogue are intentionally misspelled and improper grammar is used.
Examples are 'Wha' 'Lez' 'killin' 'enouff' 'ain't'.
I regularly run a spellchecker before uploading new chapters, and have just done so again. The only errors it shows are deliberate errors such as those above, proper names, and slang expressions, such as 'clit' and 'cunt.'
I also am aware that I use 'come' when some might use 'cum.' That is a personal choice.
The story is now almost 50,000 words long. I do not reread it from the beginning each time, though I did do so a few weeks ago, and I found a few errors and inconsistencies. 'Thrown' for 'throne' was one.
On understories.com, where I upload the entire story from the beginning every time I add chapters, I changed these.
On BDSM Library, I plan to do when the story is finished.
If the reviewer, or anyone else, is aware of any spelling or grammatical errors in the story, I would be grateful for them to be brought to my attention so I can correct them if necessary.
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sextroll
(Edit) (Oct 14, 2010)
- Please don't take my review the wrong way. I love this story. It is exciting but it is also very provocative in the way it makes me think about how Carol falls into a world which she never thought she could. I also find the sub plot of Ross slowly finding her path more and more repulsive yet exciting at the same time to be excellent. My partner and I often fantasize about her doing a gang bang or exploring some of the other themes brought up in this story. I love this story because it asks the question of when does the fantasy become a realty?
Thanks for posting it.
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Katt_
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Jun 25, 2010 |
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Hmmm. I am not sure I really liked this. It was reasonably well written in terms of language, but it lacked motivation for the characters. The characters all seemed a bit empty to me. (6/10)
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Amars
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Jun 9, 2010 |
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Fantastic. Very good pace. Want more (10/10)
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Millie
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May 14, 2010 |
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This was first class. More please. (10/10)
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Belpheghor
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May 13, 2010 |
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Das ist ein wirklich guter Anfang. Klasse Idee, dem Ehemann eine Videoaufzeichnung zu schicken, in der er erfährt, auf welche Sexspiele seine liebe Ehefrau steht. Ich hoffe darauf, baldmöglichst mehr lesen zu dürfen. (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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May 13, 2010 |
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Magisterial opener, epic in its simplicity and accurateness.
The nonchalant way the descriptions are presented reeks of an author --without literary pretences or ambitions-- who has exactly that talent and ability to not being able to come-up with anything else but literature.
In other words: excellent!
Now goeth forth and spreadeth thyne talents...
JJ (10/10)
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CrazedDog
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May 11, 2010 |
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WOW! You wrote fantastic tease for the opening. What made her this way? What did she go through to become so compliant, so submissive? Strong word pictures. I can't wait from the rest of the story! (10/10)
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Surtea
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May 10, 2010 |
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Absolutely magnificent! Made me shiver and so hot to know what happens next!
More please. Pretty please? (10/10)
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- Replied by:
wltedford
(Edit) (May 10, 2010)
- Thanks for the review. The next chapter will be on the way soon.
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rocket71
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May 10, 2010 |
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Good stuff. (10/10)
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