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Survival
Author: TheSouthernLady
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(Added on Apr 27, 2010)
(This month 11339 readers) (Total 26629 readers) |
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Kidnapped,Beaten,Raped.in a town where no one cares come see if getting out is an option. |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
Average
Rating:  (3.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Tavy
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Nov 18, 2011 |
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Unable to get more than a quarter of use way through as practicably unreadable (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
fantazmaster
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May 8, 2010 |
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I like the basic ideas in this story,but have to concur with the other reviewers on the diction issues.Also the author may want to consider writing in third person vs the first person perspective predominant throughout this story. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
csr
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May 3, 2010 |
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I'm sorry, although it looked promising I could not finish it. There are many people who would gladly edit for you if English is new to you. I understand it is hard to write creatively in another language and applaud you for trying, however please use the services of an editor to let your imagination shine through. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
TheSouthernLady
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Apr 30, 2010 |
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OK guys I'm looking back over it. re-reading it for the umpteenth time. i have had quite a few people look over it. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
csr
(Edit) (May 3, 2010)
- I see you liked it. ;-)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Apr 30, 2010 |
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I am sorry I have to agree with Michael247, but I did not even get half way through before giving up. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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Apr 28, 2010 |
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I tried. I really did. But I was only able to get half-way through your story. I spent the majority of my time trying to figure out what you MEANT to say, rather than what you did say. If English is not your primary language, please find an editor who can help you through the difficulties. *** I can't even begin to comment on the plot, sexual tension, arc, or climax because I was so distracted by the wrong words and misspellings. *** The only other thing I can caution you on is to watch tense. Some of your paragraphs are in present tense, and some are in past tense. Pick one, preferably PAST TENSE. Even accomplished writers have trouble with present tense. Michael Alexander (www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (2/10)
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