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A Contest
Author: Surtea
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(Added on Apr 22, 2010)
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A rather humiliating beauty contest... |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
ashley_craves_cruel
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Jun 9, 2010 |
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Wicked. Your subject matter meshes intimately with my own loves. You have a gift. No worry about lack of illustrations. We know what they are or approximately. A CPA or a very linear type reader might have a problem, but they're better off reading the WSJ. This is eroticism, friends, and you, Ms., know the craft. (10/10)
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paulopost
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Apr 30, 2010 |
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You Had an excellent idea! Farrell drawings are so cruel and inspiring! How about some new stories inspired by "Jeux Cruel - Cruel Games" or "Perversions"? (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Surtea
(Edit) (May 1, 2010)
- Thank you for your review. I have dozens of these stories so will keep amusing folks for some time. I will have to post them in understories.com first though as they manage to actually add the pictures in, which was the whole point of it!
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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Apr 28, 2010 |
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What a fantastic story! I'm not a breast fetishist, so I was very pleased and surprised that this little tale had everything I look for in a good story: plot, story arc, climax, sexual tension, and great story telling. I admit I do wish I had gotten to see the illustrations. I checked out the author's page over at understories.com but was unable to locate this story there. Oh well. Keeping in mind that this story was written AROUND illustrations, I'll moderate my criticism about scene descriptions. There were none. However, this could have been intentional by the author since the story was MEANT to be read WITH the accompanying illustrations. So the lack of scene descriptors don't really phase me. What I didn't care for was the listings. The story is told in third person omniscient, and when it came time to introduce the reader to the ladies, I felt like I was handed a list, rather than getting to meet the characters within the story. It just felt a little...um...out of place. Did it hurt the story? No, but I would have loved to have maybe a scene included where each girl was brought forward to stand in front of the audience while the author gave us the descriptions without the "list" format. Same things with the clothing choices for the models. *** Grammar, vocabulary, and structure was all excellent, which is practically a rarity here at the BDSM Library. So kudos to Surtea for providing us with an excellent little short story to entertain and excite our senses. Michael Alexander (www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Surtea
(Edit) (Apr 28, 2010)
- I plead guilty as charged...
It is written round a picture and it is frustrating to me that the people who upload fail to achieve what understories does: proper illustrations. It takes time even to write a short story and we deserve better.
In my long stories I go for a lot of description and scene setting. In the shorts I leave that to the picture, which then gets left out. So I will from now on post my shorts elsewhere first. Go to understories and click on any of my stories. a list of the others then appears at the top of the opened one!
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| Reviewer:
Surtea
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Apr 25, 2010 |
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Once again please don't flame my story because the folks running the site cannot cope with files properly. First time I tried a .doc file, this time a .pdf one. Each time they stuff it up with consumate artistry. It is enough to make you weep as I like the feedback system on this site. To see the story properly with the illustration please go to understories.com. In the future I will make sure my illustrated stories go there first so as to avoid frustration on everybody's part. (9/10)
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JimmyJump
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Apr 25, 2010 |
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Well, I wouldn't want to flame any of your stories, Surtea. First of all because you're too good a writer, and secondly, I've got Farrell's books.
I stumbled across "A Contest" at understories last week. Drawing appears just fine over there.
Anyway, I think you're doing a fine job on these concomitant texts, so, keep on going, please.
Must get re-aquainted with "Hirst Hall", one of these. Lost track on that one. See you there.
JJ (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Surtea
(Edit) (Apr 25, 2010)
- Thanks Jimmy.
It does get frustrating that Djian can manage to get the files uploaded right and here they struggle. I will put the next one at understories first. But Hirst Hall takes most of my time and these are really just light relief (pun intended).
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