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re-education
Author: slaveboyusa
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(Added on Feb 26, 2010)
(This month 61672 readers) (Total 78398 readers) |
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The year is 2100 and the world economy is in bad shape, so much so that its time for a serious economic reshaping. The government of an unnamed country has decided to strip all the wealth from the elite and redistribute it among everyone else. It was decided that the entertainment industry is the least practical of all sectors and therefore should be the first to pay. Movie and music studios and sport venues across the country have been closed down and any and all movie, music and sport contracts of celebrities are null and void. While some of these celebrities can accept this change as a result of the ever changing economy and can afford to live off their investments, there are those that cannot accept that their fame and fortune are gone. This is the story of the re-education of those actors, musicians and athletes that protested the abrupt change in society. |
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jazzfan
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An interesting premise, and the first installment is pretty good, though it could use a few tweaks for clarity, variety, and energy.
I'm not sure if this is a limitation of the forum software (I'm a fairly new visitor), but there needs to be more separation (white space) between paragraphs. There is a lot of visual run-on.
As you add chapters, please put some thought and effort into variety and believability. For example, what is the goal of "reducating" former entertainers and athletes? It can't be JUST to make sex slaves of them, ot your tale will quickly become boring and predictable. But the initial outing has a lot of promise! (8/10)
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