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Fallen From Grace
Author: obohobo
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(Added on Feb 26, 2010)
(This month 15209 readers) (Total 25722 readers) |
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Left in charge of the mansion, the young daughter and her friend delight in severely punishing the servants. When his Lordship returns unexpectedly, they have to pay an unwelcome price for their misdeeds. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Silversea
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Nov 23, 2010 |
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This was a very good story. It had a very intriguing and arousing premise; a mistress switching places with a servant. The beginning was very good, the characters well formed and prose well composed. But towards the middle it just got messy and lost a lot of it's flare. I would have had it so Victoria would ahve stayed at her fathers house, and suffered there.
Overall it was good, but would be better rewritten (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
jazzfan
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Mar 5, 2010 |
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The premise is interesting, the characters promising, and the formatting is clear and easy to read. However, I thought the plot was messy and confusing, and I definitely agree with DeGrinch that the sex needs to be hotter and more central to the storyline. A rewrite that makes the story stronger and clearer would easily add two points, especially if there was more bondage and a scene describing Lesbian delights between Juliette and Victoria. (7/10)
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DeGrinch
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Mar 2, 2010 |
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Well written, with good sentence structure, fairly good character development. The scenes are well discribed. I thought that the author had some of the characters doing and saying things that didn't fit with their earlier development, but perhaps I read it wrong.
As a reader I would have enjoyed a bit more detail in the sex. (8/10)
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Major Littmann
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Feb 26, 2010 |
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Overall it doesn't really work as a plot but there's some nice imagery and its an engaging tale proably too long winded for a single chunk two or more parts would have been better! (8/10)
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