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Author: diving_belle
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(Added on Feb 7, 2010)
(This month 51587 readers) (Total 64736 readers) |
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it was to be her first punishment from her Master...a punishment, she would never forget! |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Snark
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Feb 11, 2010 |
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The formatting definitely needs some work...but it is readable. Mainly it needs some editing; probably the number one criticism of any story here...or any where else. The progression works, the intensity builds and the punishments are imaginative. Shows definite promise...I'd like to read some more of this or another sub's story. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Major Littmann
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Feb 8, 2010 |
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Awful formatting, no paragraphs, lack of capitalisation none of this takes away from the awful medicocracy of this tale. (3/10)
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