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A Message from the Cartel
Author: Thomit Seno
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(Added on Jan 28, 2010)
(This month 35150 readers) (Total 69121 readers) |
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Wanda makes a serious mistake, and the drug cartel punishes her in typically brutal fashion. She submits, however, under duress of drugs and discovers that demise leads to pleasure. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Luvr
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Nov 25, 2010 |
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I enjoyed the story immensely, though I'm confused as to why the story shows a part 2 that is the same as part 1.
There seems to be a few things that were skipped and perhaps that was on purpose, like the jewelry and what happens to it after it's put in the condoms. For me, seeing (reading) that detail would have been nice. (7/10)
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littleone_
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Feb 13, 2010 |
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It was really a work of art. I think masterdw was looking for a suck and fuck story and this is S/M erotic art. I got one complaint, chapter one and two are the same chapter? Change that I'll raise my score to a 10. (7/10)
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Emerson
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Feb 6, 2010 |
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Well done. I came expecting the brutal, bland action that you find on most stories here, but to my surprise I found a gem of excellent writing. I love the interplay between the painting and your writing. I'd definitely advocate continuing to work on this to refine it further; it has a lot of potential. (10/10)
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masterdw
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Feb 4, 2010 |
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Sorry, I found it boring. Especially on a site like this, you have to tell a story. (6/10)
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Curtis
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Feb 1, 2010 |
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"Does this take long?" asked Miguel.
"Yeah, awhile," Sanchez answered.
So does this story, and in the end… it doesn't end, it just peters out. Well written, with only one error that I could see ('taught' when 'taut' was intended), this story is excruciating in its approach (intentionally, I believe) and left me with a hollow, incomplete feeling. It reminds me of "No Exit", or "Waiting For Godot". One thing this story desperately requires is the 'slow' code. Beyond that, it's a powerful story, masterfully written, and probably doesn't belong on this site. I'm giving it a '10' because it doesn't fit the descriptions of 7, 8 or 9 (I did not find it worth reading, I wouldn't recommend it, and it wasn't very enjoyable), but it would be a crime to saddle it with a '6'. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Thomit Seno
(Edit) (Feb 1, 2010)
- Thanks for your comments. I appreciate your criticism of the slow approach, and admit the deficiency. As far as the end goes, I guess the implication is there that there is some greater climax, but I have not the heart to tell it explicitly. Sorry to let you down on that.
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| Reviewer:
kemosabe
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Jan 30, 2010 |
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Deliscious! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Thomit Seno
(Edit) (Jan 30, 2010)
- Thanks very much. I apologize for the blocking of the text and the obliteration of the paragraphs.
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