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Melissa: Big City Girl?
Author: Jake Olive
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(Added on Jan 17, 2010)
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A young wife needs to mature fast and prove to her husband she will make him proud in the big city. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
jls152
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Mar 21, 2010 |
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Very nice ending. Living here in PV,KS I really enjoyed your local flavor. Keep up the good work, Melissa. -J (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Jake Olive
(Edit) (Mar 21, 2010)
- j -, Thanks you. I appreciate the note. As for the local flavor....I really love hearing from our people and I hoped it would happen, thank you.
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Feb 16, 2010 |
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Maybe the best ending for a porn story I've seen on this site. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Jake Olive
(Edit) (Feb 16, 2010)
- Thank you Curtis, I appreciate it very much.
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| Reviewer:
zenoida
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Feb 2, 2010 |
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I enjoyed the story a lot. It seems to be just the beginning, but that doesn't make it worse. I love that the wife is snotty and superficial, I really am cheering for the husband and his helpers, not her. And I liked that she did not enjoy her spankings, though more elaboration on her AND her husbands experience would be great:) I'm very much looking forward to part three. (9/10)
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SirPat45
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Jan 22, 2010 |
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As with the previous review the story was left with so many possibilities for more chapters. My only complaint is that it would be nice if it was in a larger font size. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Jake Olive
(Edit) (Jan 22, 2010)
- Thanks, I have written at least new new stories for Melissa. Seems to me the set up is the hard part, part #2 was much easier to write and more fun. Will do on the font size.
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SensoryOverlord
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Jan 19, 2010 |
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Really ingenious and believable premise, and a pleasure to read. I'd give a 9, but the story stops too soon. Is this meant to be complete, or the first part in a series?
Also, perhaps it could have done with some elaboration of her experience during the spanking? What, no arousal at all? How about the potential for that to amplify the humiliation? Or does that come later? She's a smart girl, all the better for the psychology plays.
Hopefully her 'maturation' will involve quite a bit more than a daily spanking? Lots of potential here for some quite subtle 'tests' of her resolution, commitment and self control. Teasing and denial perhaps? What's the plan?
So much potential here! Definitely hoping to see more of this!
One more suggestion: paragraph breaks make a story so much more readable. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Jake Olive
(Edit) (Jan 22, 2010)
- Thanks for good words and the advice. Additional parts are comming soon. I will try and make it a little easier to read. I am a rookie.
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