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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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Rating:  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Lisa Jones
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Oct 14, 2010 |
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I think that azrig17 misses the point. This is a fantasy and should be read as such. Do we quibble at all the inconsistencies in a James Bond movie, or in Pirates Of The Caribbean, no, we accept them for what they are, fantasies in a fantasy world.
And what a fantasy world this is. Captv8td's attention to detail, the fully rounded characters, the desire to tell much, much more than just another slave training story lifts this beyond the run of the mill and into one of the better stories on the site.
As Dryhill says, take it for what it is, suspend your disbelief and enter Captv8td's universe and enjoy the ride.
(10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Mar 31, 2010 |
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Yet another good story from Capt8vd. In some ways I agree with azrig17, but lets remember this is fantasy. Just read and enjoy. (8/10)
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azrlg17
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Jan 20, 2010 |
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Another of the uncatchable all-powerful global multinational slavering stories. Has the usual problem that the slavers have to be nearly omnipotent and perfect so that no slave ever can escape. And they make a lot of mistakes in the story.
6 beautiful successful women disappear at the same time? That would be in the press for months, I think an organization like that wouldn't want the scrutiny.
The last slave from Kate was simply let go? After she disappeared for so long? That kind of risk is insane.
The chip thingy? Let's say that it would be technically possible to create a small chip that is updatable with the coordinates of every police station in the world (in realtime), can differentiate between a phone call the slave places and just being near a phone when someone talks (and hey why not put in going online) and kill someone in a non-detectable manner (and for such a high profile case be undetectable during an autopsy). Let's say this chip has a lifetime energy supply of antimatter. What exactly is stopping a slave from - gasp - writing a letter? Going to a police officer outside of a police station or simply killing her owner? Or getting a cat-scan and removing the stupid thing? And how is the gps supposed to work indoors? Or under thicker clothes or simply aluminium foil?
Then there are the personalities. The woman nicknamed piranha gives in with no fight at all?? In 2 days? A good friend has no problem and is happy being a slave totally disregarding the feelings of her friends? OK that one is possible although with friends like that...
The sex itself is too sterile for me. There are no feelings, or they are simply spelled out instead of described (I mean writing a sentence that she felt humiliated instead of describing it).
The spelling and grammar is good.
The author left out all story codes, I'd say F/f, M/f, nc, consensual, scifi (or maybe the chip thing is a bluff, I guess a lawyer maybe wouldn't get that). (6/10)
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littleone_
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Jan 4, 2010 |
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Really good. It has good sex, a good plot, good characters and a story that has a beginning, middle and an ending. I do think it that when Tempest was back in Chicago she would have found a way to escape or pass word to her family where she was. That point should be fleshed out a bit more I think. May like if she gets more the X number of fee away from a broadcast town her internal capsule would activate but I'm thinking maybe even that would not keep her from passing word to somebody about where she was through a delivery person one of the people she interviewed. (10/10)
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