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The New Submissive Gets Punished
Author: moco
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(Added on Mar 14, 2009)
(This month 10429 readers) (Total 23041 readers) |
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A new sub gets punished for her lack of motivation for school. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
werbored
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Mar 20, 2009 |
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good job , nice start prctice , practice , practice (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
TwistedTails
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Mar 19, 2009 |
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Enjoyed the story. As others have said, some formatting would make it easier to read. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
fallenstar
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Mar 16, 2009 |
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I love the story moco! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Switchhitter7
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Mar 16, 2009 |
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Paragraphs would help.They don't have to pass the rules of grammar, just logic. Better too many that too few. Who are they? Are they father and daughter? Teacher and student. You must give some background. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
lr123
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Mar 15, 2009 |
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Good job Moco...i enjoy the story very much... Looking forward to another writing from you...
(7/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 15, 2009 |
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ok but needs work, see the above remoakrs and suggestions (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Sahaqiel
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Mar 15, 2009 |
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Holy wall o' text, Batman!
The writing itself was decent, although a little repetitive with most sentences starting with "You" or "I", but the lack of paragraphs made this painful to read. Please, break it up a little. (4/10)
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