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My holiday in Britain
Author: fbn
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(Added on Mar 5, 2009)
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During my holiday in Britain, everything and more happened than I wished for... |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
lovetoxdress {Mtoltox}
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Mar 7, 2009 |
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I like the story line maybe a little less whipping more little more forced fem.. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
fbn
(Edit) (Mar 7, 2009)
- Thanks for your review! you have a point there. I would have liked it that way as well. Although heavilly dramatized it is based on real events that happened during our holiday. Is it good enough to post more?
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| Reviewer:
Dr_BuzzCzar
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Mar 6, 2009 |
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With some editing to remove some misused words ('crouch' for 'crotch' for instance) and grammar this would be an excellent story. It has a nice flow and good command of dialogue. Nice work. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
fbn
(Edit) (Mar 7, 2009)
- Thank you for your review! I've just started writing and English isn't my first language. I am happy with your review. I will try to correct the mistakes and re-publish. Do you think it will be worth it to publish the rest of the story?
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