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Tennis
Author: Slave Kolkata
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(Added on Feb 1, 2009)
(This month 59917 readers) (Total 85484 readers) |
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How an aspiring tennis star becomes the slave of another. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
Juventino
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Jun 4, 2010 |
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Giving it a higher rating because English is a second language to the author so i will ignore grammar. Not a bad concept in fact a great concept, however it was rushed, the author needs to spend more time on situations and make them a bit more believable, for example elena just accepts being handed over as slave which just isn't real. Other wise the author does have promise and i can imagine him/her posting a gem in future (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Longterm247
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Feb 28, 2009 |
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I like the story a lot and the concept. I am into WTA tennis very much, so this was a refreshing story to read with nice moments of humiliation and domination.
I have had an idea of a tennis story for a while myself, I would like you to collaborate with me on the idea, if you are interested, I will give you the story outline by e-mail.
Let's just say that it involves the real dominant women of tennis, the Sharapova's and Ivanovic's having their way with the weaker slim women of tennis like the Wozniacki's and Hingis's. (8/10)
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littleone_
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Feb 26, 2009 |
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I agree with the other reviews that Kolkata has promise as a writer. her theme was new and her story line was very good. I have to agree the other reviewers that said English has to be a second language for Kolkata. That could be fixed with a decent editor. The story could also use more character development and dialogue. With a bit of practive and an editor Kolkata could become a first class writer. (5/10)
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fitzgilbert
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Feb 6, 2009 |
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to be continued for our pleasure (8/10)
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jkim
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Feb 3, 2009 |
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gyrl likes the creativity of the idea. if you would please break it into more paragraphs, that would help. also, more dialogue. there is a chance for this to be an excellent story. (8/10)
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efwb2
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Feb 3, 2009 |
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i like it great idea and i want to read more from you. (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Feb 2, 2009 |
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This is a great idea that sadly deteriorates in quality, not because it's badly written, but because Slave Kolkata doesn't seem to have English as native tongue.
As a result, there's way too many errors is spelling, syntax and grammer to make the story thoroughly enjoyable.
But like I said, I liked the idea, and because Slave Kolkata seems to be genuinly doing her best, I still grant this story a nice eight.
JJ (8/10)
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