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The Hunting Championship
Author: Rotneb
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(Added on Jan 28, 2009)
(This month 22731 readers) (Total 35092 readers) |
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The meeting between tree naked girls and two hunters make it possible to legal hunt of naked preys. Jenna runs the champion competition in the winter snow. |
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Average (?):  (3/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Major Littmann
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Jan 31, 2009 |
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This is very poor. where is the passion, where is the purpose, I could understand if it was Sci Fi or ancient Chinese but it does not work in contemporary Western Society without different racial groups.
Perhaps one day I will write of these things, but laughable language aside it is a very poor badly thought out piece of work which only scrapes a two because the author spent so much time writing this huge waste of kilobytes. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 30, 2009 |
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I fear our amigo here doesn't have English as native language.
Like NaughtyNora said, the story has promise (at least, the idea isn't bad), but the jibberish in which this is presented is almost unreadable at times.
A pity, because I'm sure that Rotneb could do well when either posting in his own language, or finding someone to do a decent translation for him.
JJ (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
NaughtyNora
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Jan 30, 2009 |
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The idea of this story has promise but the grammar and spelling mistakes, and even missing words, make it painful (not in a good way!) to read. If you resubmit it after a good proofreading it might be redeemable. (2/10)
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