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The Mall of Torture
Author: R.B. Thibo
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(Added on Jan 25, 2002)
(This month 165754 readers) (Total 234100 readers) |
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As a security guard for the mall, he got a lot of chance to arrest the shoplifting girls. After discovering the hidden basement under the mall, he had an idea about how to put it in use. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
e.e. norcod
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Feb 20, 2004 |
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A wild ride! The author has an extraordinarily well developed talent for creating BDSM fantasy. Unfortunately the author's literary skills are a bit deficient. For example, in Chapter 1 the author seems to have forgotten about how past tense is usually employed. In chapter 2 the protagonist does things with his penis that are anatomically impossible (e.g. pushing it through the cervical os). Some of the malapropisms are funny, some are merely irritating. The same can be said for some of the purple prose. I could go on but I won't. The disadvantage of web posting versus publishing is the absence of an editor. A good editor could have turned what is a good and at time amusing story into a great story. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Engineer
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Feb 16, 2002 |
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Good idea, very well written, nice to read. Just a little bit too much scope on degradation. (7/10)
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wabusheshe
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Jan 30, 2002 |
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Well written, holds interest throughout. Lots of suspence on what Roy is going to do next. Thought it ended a bit abruptly, if a little more had been put into the ending I think I might have given this a 10. (9/10)
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WMassa
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Jan 28, 2002 |
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Use to vote 10 if it's striking hard, like this one is, and bloody. But it takes a little long to come to the very point. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Llabmik
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Jan 28, 2002 |
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Very inspirational!! Very good, original ideas. (9/10)
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58jaz
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Jan 27, 2002 |
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Very good.Great BDSM mix (8/10)
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helenaj
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Jan 27, 2002 |
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some horrible nonsex torture bits but some really really exciting bits and the overall idea is really really really exciting (7/10)
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