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The Shopping Trip
Author: Salvaje Dominado
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(Added on Dec 6, 2008)
(This month 54619 readers) (Total 61350 readers) |
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Sex was the last thing on Greg's mind and since his divorce, what with his work and other social commitments; Greg had almost come to terms with what he hoped was his temporary celibacy. So, as he arrived tired at the end of the day and parked his car, the thought that the evening might end in a sexual encounter didn't even enter his head. |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Feb 1, 2009 |
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(December 08 2008)I'm with Lucy here... I don't mind buying a book, in fact I have over 2000 of the buggers stacked in boxes (recently moved), but I dislike the fact that you abuse a free members site to promote stuff which isn't free...
BDSM Library is not a teaser trailer host, but a place where people enjoy each others fantasies put to paper for no money at all.
Next time, like Lucy said, explain yer plans in the introduction...
JJ (8/10)
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- Replied by:
salvajedominado
(Edit) (Dec 9, 2008)
- Feedback is always informative, but when it’s negative the urge to kick back is strong; and that is an urge which must be resisted. In this instance I think the negativity stems from a misunderstanding of purpose and intention.
The first part of ‘A Shopping Trip’ doesn’t contain steamy action nor does it claim to and, yes it could be described as ending mid-sentence. Both are symptoms of one fact: it’s an extract from a complete work of fiction, not something that’s being added to each week. As the first chapter of a novella then, its purpose is to set the scene. It ends using a literary device which has clearly had its effect, but been misunderstood in its intention … which is to heighten the anticipation of the reader!
Although too short to be described as a full length novel, it was never my intention to publish only the first chapter. My intention was to publish three extracts as I did with ‘Vows of Submission’ but given the negative response I will publish the second and third extracts together. This will hopefully achieve two things. The first is to satisfy those who want to read about Mark and Annabel actually getting down to it. Secondly, it will hopefully demonstrate the structure of the novella, because although they do get up close and intimate in Chapter 2, thereby further heightening the anticipation … they don’t actually get down to it until Chapter 3!
As for what should be free, my intention is to provide readers with enough free for them to enjoy - hence three extracts - and hopefully attract some custom; not simply to exploit the site without giving anything in return.
Happy reading and have a happy holiday season!
Best wishes,
Salvaje
- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Feb 1, 2009)
- Okay, you came through and also explained things a wee bit. Since you don't seem to be un-simpatico, I've changed the rating to reflect the merits I thinkl the story deserves, instead of on prejudice.
JJ
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mrfaja01
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Dec 25, 2008 |
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Great story I hope there is nore to cum. (7/10)
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lucy
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Dec 8, 2008 |
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Sorry for the rating. It actually is brilliantly written and i would have loved to read the rest of it.
But the fact that it stops more or less midesentence and then you provide a link to a pay site just sucks big time. Hence the rating.
I mean, there's nothing wrong with advertising your story, but please say so in the summary so people can decide if they want to read it. (1/10)
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- Replied by:
salvajedominado
(Edit) (Dec 9, 2008)
- Feedback is always informative, but when it’s negative the urge to kick back is strong; and that is an urge which must be resisted. In this instance I think the negativity stems from a misunderstanding of purpose and intention.
The first part of ‘A Shopping Trip’ doesn’t contain steamy action nor does it claim to and, yes it could be described as ending mid-sentence. Both are symptoms of one fact: it’s an extract from a complete work of fiction, not something that’s being added to each week. As the first chapter of a novella then, its purpose is to set the scene. It ends using a literary device which has clearly had its effect, but been misunderstood in its intention … which is to heighten the anticipation of the reader!
Although too short to be described as a full length novel, it was never my intention to publish only the first chapter. My intention was to publish three extracts as I did with ‘Vows of Submission’ but given the negative response I will publish the second and third extracts together. This will hopefully achieve two things. The first is to satisfy those who want to read about Mark and Annabel actually getting down to it. Secondly, it will hopefully demonstrate the structure of the novella, because although they do get up close and intimate in Chapter 2, thereby further heightening the anticipation … they don’t actually get down to it until Chapter 3!
As for what should be free, my intention was to provide enough free for people to read and enjoy - hence three extracts - and hopefully pick up some custom along the way: not simply to exploit the site for what I could get out of it.
Happy reading and have a happy holiday season!
Best wishes,
Salvaje
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