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Weighed
Average (?): (6/10) |
Average
Rating: (7/10) |
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Reviewer:
Curtis
(Edit) |
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Nov 6, 2008 |
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I'm sorry you haven't gotten any other reviews, Zoie. This really isn't my style of story, so I'm trying to prime the pump here. I'm not not in favor of this convention of using double initial letters on pronouns (for example, O/our). That aside, your story is good technically., and you also know how to tell a story. Not too much detail; not too little. Your backgrounds are engrossing, and your characters are well-drawn. I think you're a better writer than you are a porn writer. Though this story might pass in a collection of erotica for women, I didn't find it to be good 'stroke' material. If someome else had reviewed this I would not have, because I have enough respect for the work you've put in that I don't want to screw up your average rating. (7/10)
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