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A Slave's Life
Author: pyxzie
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(Added on Oct 29, 2008)
(This month 63994 readers) (Total 85170 readers) |
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Master Zanity is well know in his town as the hot spot to be. You are only the luckyest to be invited to one of his dinner parties. Not only is the food good but the show is great. That is unless you are the entertainers. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
pyxzie
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Oct 31, 2008 |
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Please understand i do not have ANY spellchecker or grammar program on my computer. i did the best i could with what i have been given. i'm sorry for your headaches. i posted this for the story it's self not the spelling! Not everyone here comes from America and can write the proper english way. Hell i live in America and don't understand all the rules of writing. i have alwasys wanted to write but due to my learning issues i have never done anything with this imagination of mine. i guess what i'm saying is sorry for not being perfect. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Oct 30, 2008 |
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as i read through it i noticed it needed work, but it was still to me readable nd enjoyable, you might wantto have it proofed before you post then ext part, buti look forward to reading it (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
yesssir
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Oct 30, 2008 |
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I logged on here to say the same thing MASTERDW said. I had to quit reading half way through the story because of the pitiful spelling and grammar. That's sad because I was intrigued by the story line. Of course, then I reread the intro/teaser line and should have known better. (FYI, there are 6 spelling and gramatical errors in just those four sentences above)
Example: In the story, you repeatedly wrote "gaurd" and it is spelled GUARD. You aren't lead(like a pipe) down a hall, you are LED down a hall. A shower isn't roomie(the person you live with), its ROOMY. You don't stair(the thing you climb) at the ground, you STARE at it. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
masterdw
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Oct 30, 2008 |
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The spelling is so poor as to make the story unreadable. I do not mind an occasional typo, I make my share, but when I first found crouch used instead of crotch, I became suspicious of the quality of the writing. Crouch is what a catcher does, crotch is what he scratches. I am sorry, but there was nut enough excitement or originality in the story to make it worth wading through. (4/10)
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LawrenceToo
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Oct 30, 2008 |
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I do wish writers would use a spell checker. It would help to learn more English syntax, for example when to use "too" versus "to". It's hard to take a well used theme and make anything new with it. Of course with erotica looking for a new theme is rarely the point. (5/10)
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copper thorn
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Oct 30, 2008 |
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look forward to more. (10/10)
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