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Capture and training of a slave
Author: MasterD
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(Added on Sep 22, 2008)
(This month 133024 readers) (Total 204273 readers) |
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Middle age man comes into money and deides only a slave will make his lfe complete. The object of the training is total control over every aspect of slaves life. Humiliation will be the key to breaking the will of a rebelious slave. Pain will prove to overwhelm the slaves willpower. Following chapters will take the slave to the depths of degradation. |
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| Reviewer:
Laura.Dane
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May 15, 2011 |
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Well-written and hard-core, the story delves into a number of areas that held my attention and excited my interest. (9/10)
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fluttrz
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Apr 20, 2011 |
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i found this story both very well written and believable. not only did the author write very realistically but from both the Owners point of view but amazingly was able to write from the slaves side and make it both enjoyable and worthly of future reading. (10/10)
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Panther007
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Jan 11, 2010 |
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A good series and nice compelling characters. If you ever start up again I'd love to read them. Maybe he get's another female slave or meets a domme would help in the training. (9/10)
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prn.surfer
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Mar 13, 2009 |
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While I do agree with JimmyJump's observation that the start could have been more detailed, I understand that the meat of the story is the master/slave and training aspect, and as such, I think the approach of the author in dispensing with the prologue, if you will, is acceptable. Other than that, this ranks among some of the best stories I have read on this site.
Very erotic! Way to go! (9/10)
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Switchhitter7
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Mar 10, 2009 |
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I do not understand JimmyJump. The plan was arranging to cut his ties to existing life, becoming a respected member of a new community, setting up his house to hace all the facilities he needed, and most of all choosing a suitable victim who "never would be missed".
The story involves the use of sensory deprivation,pain and humiliation to break her will and make her into a total slave. I like this type of story. It is more than just beating the slave till she passes out. It is playing with the slaves head. I recommend it highly (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Mar 6, 2009 |
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I've also been reading stories on this site, for close to 5 years now. To my dismay (after reading the other reviewers' praise) I must say that this here tale isn't anything special.
Okay, so there's a certain writing skill there, but the content seriously lacks both in credibility and detail.
The first two paragraphs manage to skip a complete novel, where-in we should learn of what exactly our hero means with what's described (or not described, for that matter).
Furthermore, the Hero has everything planned well, so the author writes, but what exactly that plan consists of is a big mystery.
They only plan I've seen is that the dude speaks to a woman in the street (in broad daylight), by giving her some vague 'descriptions' and then follows the woman on a 'bike' (bycicle or motorcycle?), to his own house, where he drugs some wine and wham-bam-thank-you-mam we've got ourselves a slave.
Well, our hero might got himself a slave, that doesn't mean we the readers have got ourselves a story. Far from.
Some (most) writers overlook the fact that a story needs a start, a midddle section and an end to be entitled to the moniker "story".
Here, the middle section is rather chunky and fairly well written, but the start holds water like a 90-year old with prostate problems: it leaks on all sides.
Even the middle section, or the actual story, if you like, reads more like the wishful-thinking-ness of the author than as a 'real' story.
It's nice to envision some enslaving shenanigans, to me there has to be a certain amount of credibility involved. This story has none.
What saves the whole thing is, like I said, that it's rather well written.
JJ (5/10)
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subcatheee
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Dec 9, 2008 |
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I felt it needed an ending. (8/10)
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dennisthmn
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Nov 14, 2008 |
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Very good. I would love to woman like her. (8/10)
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Trainstation
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Nov 12, 2008 |
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I have been reading stories on here for three years and this is as good as it gets. I love the way the author slowly and methodically works on the mind and body of his slave. Great idea in picking a slave that has the sexual and cult background that you picked for her. I like her thoughts too. Keep on writing. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
masterdw
(Edit) (Nov 16, 2008)
- Thanks. It is reviews like yours that encourage me to write. I will start chapter 4.
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| Reviewer:
masterdw
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Nov 9, 2008 |
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My 4th chapter will deal with Liz' period and I would appreciate any assistance from a female as I, obviously, have never menstruated. I have never seen the this topic dealt with in pornographic fiction. Please help. (9/10)
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sirbor
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Oct 10, 2008 |
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I enjoyed the story and the plot development, and I hope to see your second chapter here and many more also. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
masterdw
(Edit) (Oct 10, 2008)
- Chapter 2 has been misfiled. It islisted under CATURE AND TRAINING FACILITY. I reaaly do appreciate your feedback
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Escritor
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Oct 8, 2008 |
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Very good start. Some grammar and spelling mistakes, but that's all. Try to use a writing processor (like Word) before submitting your story to the Library to reduce the quantity of spelling and grammar errors.
I would be very interested in reading a second part to this story. Keep up the good work! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
masterdw
(Edit) (Oct 8, 2008)
- You are correct. I am better at writing than typing and better at typing than at proof reading. After I submitted it I noticed some mistakes. Perhaps I should post a revised version with chapter 3 to clean up the typos.
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Grey_Slayer
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Sep 28, 2008 |
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Very enjoyable. Please continue. (10/10)
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heycarrieanne
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Sep 27, 2008 |
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It was hot enough for me to bring out my vibrator, but not long enough for me to cum!! (9/10)
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LewisC
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Sep 24, 2008 |
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MasterD... Your story was wonderful(so far). Keep up the brilliant imagery. MLC (9/10)
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