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Free Will
Author: William Augustine
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(Added on Aug 21, 2008)
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A chance encounter reveals a new life for a man as he is seduced and dominated by a beautiful stranger. He is presented with a challenge: if successful, he will regain control of his life and new powers over others; to fail means destruction of his manhood and a lifetime of servitude. |
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| Reviewer:
y18d
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Feb 15, 2011 |
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I'm not into pain, but your story kept me reading, and I did get into the mood. The synopsis and some story codes aren't really faithful to the story though.
And I agree with Wistan, but there is another possibility: he finally gives up the idea of breaking her rule, for fear of being rejected. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
wistan
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Sep 1, 2008 |
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Very enjoyable story. I especially like how the woman discusses the man's own psychology with him, pointed out how she had spotted his submissive side.
One thing I thought jarred a little... she tells him that if she has to ask him anything more than twice she will throw him out. But then she does ask him something more than twice... and she threatens to throw him out, but then doesn't.
One of the very worst things any authority figure can do is set a rule, set a consequence, and then not follow through with the consequence when the rule is broken. In doing that, her actions teach the lesson that when she sets a rule she doesn't really mean it. It undercuts her strength and authority as a dominant.
If it were me, I would have the man break down and beg and the woman tell him that she would not go back on what she said and throw him out... but tell him he could come back later on - perhaps only a few hours later, or the next day. Trouble with that is it would put a big honkin pause in the middle of the story.
Either that, or have her set some other consequence in the first place, one that she does follow through on.
That aside, I love what you've done so far. You have great potential as a writer! (9/10)
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freecroma10
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Aug 29, 2008 |
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It is surprisingly witty story, I never have read such one this is a really unique. I am reflecting on it only would be feasible in the reality indeed? Would it not have been necessary to make a question mark after the title too?
(9/10)
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- Replied by:
William_Augustine
(Edit) (Aug 31, 2008)
- You're absolutely right. The title needs a question mark!
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theboyricardo
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Aug 28, 2008 |
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One of the best I have ever read. (9/10)
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uktrucker100
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Aug 22, 2008 |
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Cant wait for the next part:-) and the one after that. What will She do to him???
(9/10)
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