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Kate's Interesting Week
Author: Trom
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(Added on Jul 31, 2008)
(This month 54808 readers) (Total 72639 readers) |
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A teenage girl is forced to have a babysitter while her parents are away on a trip. The babysitter,an old school rival, enjoys her position of power a bit too much, and causes Kate to plot revenge on her oppressor. Part 1 includes the setup and humiliation of Kate. Part 2 will include the revenge of Kate, and possibly the conclusion. (I will finish the story, but will entertain the though of more parts based on demand) This is my first story of this type so there may be some flaws or rough edges. Please feel free to let me know so I can make this story and possibly other better. |
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Average (?): (7/10) |
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Rating: (7.5/10) |
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Reviewer:
jkim
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Sep 27, 2008 |
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i like a lot of the things in this story and wish it went slower and developed in greater detail. how about a new start, new story, that takes the slavery further and deeper? (7/10)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 7, 2008 |
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nice job very well worth reading (7/10)
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Reviewer:
thedominthehat
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Aug 6, 2008 |
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I like the plot but you should slow it down and add a little backstory. A whole day goes by but it feels like 5 minutes. Why is the girl so obedient to her babysitter so quickly? What will her parents do if she refuses? (7/10)
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schoolboylv
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Aug 6, 2008 |
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Very good but you rushed it. Each day could have been very drawn out and you need to tell what the little girl is thinking. (8/10)
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Reviewer:
Chuckdom19
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Aug 6, 2008 |
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Not a bad beginning, but needs some help with editing. Looking forward to the rest! (7/10)
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Reviewer:
slut2002gyrl
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Aug 6, 2008 |
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gyrl enjoyed the creative idea and will be interested in how it develops. she would love to increase this rating score, but is wondering how the role reversal can possibly work. (7/10)
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