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The Facility
Author: Memento
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(Added on Mar 23, 2008)
(This month 41168 readers) (Total 71142 readers) |
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Sarah gets a tour of a special facility. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (8.5/10) |
Average
Rating: (9/10) |
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Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 26, 2010 |
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i like this story because of its originality. i think we should have more feeling of disquiet boardering on panic from the girl being shown around. Also it might have been good to finish with the doctor saying "and this is what your Master wants us to do to you" and the girl starts crying. Just a thought. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 23, 2009 |
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nicely done (7/10)
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Reviewer:
Jaeger
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Mar 26, 2008 |
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I love your ideas as much as the format of your writing. A very enjoyable read indeed. I implore you to continue. (10/10)
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Reviewer:
fellatrix
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Mar 26, 2008 |
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Bizarre, very original and fascinating beginning. (10/10)
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Reviewer:
Polecat
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Mar 26, 2008 |
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Good story. Shows promise (8/10)
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