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Trust.
Author: Razor7826
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(Added on Feb 28, 2008)
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A wife lets her husband take control. By the time she regrets her decision, it is too late. |
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| Reviewer:
nikita
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Apr 1, 2008 |
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I loved the dialogue, pacing, and obvious terror of the wife. The ending was great. (9/10)
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Mad Lews
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Mar 16, 2008 |
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Well written and imaginative. Yeah we want to know all the painful details to come but you're right. Its better to leave your audience wanting more rather than bogged down with more info than they need. (9/10)
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DeGrinch
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Feb 29, 2008 |
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Gee I kind of want more, but that's the plan, right? Well written, however, you could have developed the relationship between the characters a bit more. Thanks for a good story. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Razor7826
(Edit) (Feb 29, 2008)
- Thanks for the feedback. As the comment says, there won't be anymore chapters. This was originally posted as an assignment on the Writer's Block in the forums, and I started on another chapter, but there story only really works if the husband's actions remain ambiguous.
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