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Motherly Love
Author: Razor7826
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(Added on Jan 3, 2008)
(This month 54742 readers) (Total 72517 readers) |
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A widow is defiled, but why? |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Panther007
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Mar 26, 2016 |
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Enjoyed this immensely, gripping character and some really hot twisted sex. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
jls152
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Apr 13, 2012 |
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There is little that was developed or original to enjoy. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Feb 16, 2009 |
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Story deserves a better treatment, meaning, expanding on background as well as on the 'activities' during the rape.
Getting bored writing sex-scenes comes across rather weird when laying the emphasis on the rape.
If you want to tone down the rape, you must (a word I seldom use) shift the attention towards the shenanigans of the daughter and the instigation that brought forth the rape.
Now, you have a start that's incomplete, a sex-scene which was written while yawning and watching the clock, and an ending that seems rushed.
The story was, luckily, well written, but still felt like a pond where a thousand Inuït had been ice-fishing: full of holes.
Some may think the review to be negative. I would call it constructive criticism.
Oh, and letting the rapists use Nixon masks adds nothing but the knowledge that you've also seen the Kathryn Bigelow picture "Point Break"...
JJ (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Razor7826
(Edit) (Feb 16, 2009)
- I appreciate your detailed analysis and critique.
Oh, and I've never seen Point Break. It's just an extraordinarily generic and overused mask.
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| Reviewer:
Nemz
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Jan 8, 2008 |
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A very interesting and depressing story. Really well done though. I would try expanding the opening a bit more. I honestly felt the main character was rather distant and wasn't easy to connect with the readers. If you wanted the story to be a more sexual piece, I'd also suggest adding more detail to the action. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Razor7826
(Edit) (Jan 8, 2008)
- To be honest, extended sex scenes bore me. Such an opinion is probably unusual for somebody that writes for this webpage, but writing them gets repetitive real quick. So, I prefer to focus the events and emotions surrounding them.
I see what you are saying with the distant main character. I need to work on my writing voice if I am to portray the narrators in a more interesting light.
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| Reviewer:
bmtphoenix
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Jan 7, 2008 |
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Very well done, I like. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Razor7826
(Edit) (Jan 7, 2008)
- Thank you for the positive feedback.
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| Reviewer:
DeGrinch
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Jan 6, 2008 |
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Well done, good job. I did think you could of expanded her reaction to her abuse, however. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Jan 4, 2008 |
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Unlike most of the offerings here this is a story in which the brutality and sadism are crucial parts but not the main point.The main character is well developed, for such a short piece. She is complex and flawed without "Deserving it" which makes her all the more believable. Best of all the ending leaves you thinking. Well done. (9/10)
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