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First Time in Hell
Author: princess lily
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(Added on Dec 22, 2007)
(This month 49493 readers) (Total 64125 readers) |
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She never knew what lurked in the basement. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 1, 2008 |
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every thing about the story was great, flows was wonderful, the whole text was enjoyable to read (8/10)
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Mad Lews
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Dec 28, 2007 |
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A nice hot story with lots of action. The consistent use of verb tenses and quotation marks would help the reader immensely. Might also want to check for some inconsistencies in the characters response. Early on she always hated ropes, then toward the end she had always found bondage exciting. Little things a proper editing might catch but all in all a good story well worth the read. (8/10)
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Mothbrad
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Dec 22, 2007 |
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A sweet short story, where the emotions of the narrator are nicely expressed. I'm definitely mellowing in my old age, enjoying pieces like this. Some minor grammar and spelling mistakes didn't detract too much from the story. One for the romantics. (7/10)
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