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The Correction of Linda
Author: Nightshade
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(Added on Dec 16, 2007)
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Correction of a young girl at the hands of an ageing pervert. Domistic discipline and sexual corrections gradualy increasing in intensity. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 1, 2008 |
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nice start, am looking forward to more
No problem, ALL authoirs, even Steven King has to start somewhere, it is where you go from here that matterIf you keep writing like this you will keep getting great reviews (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Nightshade1
(Edit) (Dec 19, 2007)
- Thank you, mkemse for reviewing my story. I am new to this and hopefully will get better as time goes on.The story is in four parts.Will post in other stories over time. Thank you once again for your review it has given me a little encouragement.Actually i am Nighshade but had to register and come in as Nightshade1 to reply to your review.....Thank you.........
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| Reviewer:
ladychipmunk
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Dec 30, 2007 |
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This story has some promise. It is quite a good story line but very hard to follow due to poor spelling and lack of punctuation. I would be great if you re-wrote it correcting the spelling and adding quotation marks. (5/10)
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Rocky
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Dec 19, 2007 |
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Unfortunately, the story line is somewhat ruined by the poor punctuation. There are too many run-on sentences, and the lack of quotation marks makes it difficult to read. Correct the deficiencies and I'll consider a revision to the score. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
takarada
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Dec 19, 2007 |
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Great cp story (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Nightshade1
(Edit) (Dec 19, 2007)
- Thank you takarada..............
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