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The Breeding of the Triplets
Author: dr_midnite
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(Added on Nov 18, 2007)
(This month 78780 readers) (Total 119564 readers) |
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This is a tale that occurs sometime in the future, eight unfortunate females, from the same family, two pair of triplets, and their mothers , who just happen to be twins were captured, on one of the daughters weding day. They were transported by ship to my island, unfortunately for them it was a slow ship. Allowing plenty of time for modifications to be made to their bodies, the modifications were designed to make them perfect pleasure slaves. This story occurs approximately 4 months after their arrival on the island. |
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| Reviewer:
millymooe
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Jan 27, 2008 |
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So look forward to next part.
Wickedly good and soaked my towel very quickly.
xxx milly (10/10)
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SimonMagick
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Jan 4, 2008 |
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I don't usually like sci-fi porn, but the cleverly blunt ideas lend themselves to a wonderfully over-the-top debauchery. More! (9/10)
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chksng19
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Nov 27, 2007 |
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Doc, even the reposting of the story didn't help. There's a seed of an idea here, but English grammar is obviously not your strong suit. Perhaps an editor might help? Or a collaborator? I'd like to see the idea carried on, but not in this condition. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
midnite
(Edit) (Nov 27, 2007)
- are you offering to do this?
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Nov 25, 2007 |
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not bad by concept but needs works, grammar ect (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
littleone_
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Nov 23, 2007 |
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The many typing and grammar errors make reading this story almost impossible. The author has creative talent but it will never be viable until he can construct a sentence that makes sense without having to read it three times. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
MissPiss
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Nov 23, 2007 |
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i like the premise of your story, it's interesting, but at the same time it's so confusing. The run on sentences and paragraphs makes it almost unbearable to read. but your story has promise but really needs either editing or rewrite. (4/10)
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kimmi
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Nov 23, 2007 |
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Has promise, but is very confusing. The story starts out in the middle, talks about things that happened in the past and then drops off. Too many run-on sentences and paragraphs.
Could benefit from a rewrite (5/10)
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