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Number Four..
Author: Tom of Sweden
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(Added on Nov 14, 2007)
(This month 29695 readers) (Total 47064 readers) |
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This is a story of a professional prison torturer and his relation to one torture victim. It's about how he emotionally deals with the realities of the job and attempts to justify his actions. This is not a story glorifying torture only one man's attempt to do so. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
butterflySlave4u
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Apr 8, 2008 |
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It was amazing writing, Sir...very well done! i especially was drawn to Chapter 2, where he realizes that he's becoming obsessed. i do understand the objectification, and how a man who has to deal with it daily only does so on the surface only, out of survival. It was very clearly stated! Thank You for writing, and sharing.... (9/10)
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chksng19
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Nov 20, 2007 |
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An excellently written piece from a truly different perspective, and quite enjoyable. Looking forward to more of your writing! (8/10)
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Ophelia Fey
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Nov 18, 2007 |
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From a mindfuck perspective, wow. I really liked the view from the other side.
The language is lean and mean, and the story moves right along. Well done!
(7/10)
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| Reviewer:
MissPiss
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Nov 16, 2007 |
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I enjoyed the story Tom. Despite the harshness of the subject matter, your story is definitely worth reading. Please write more stories! If there's one thing i would have liked was knowing more about the victim's feelings while she was going through the torture. But other than that, this is good. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more of your stories! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
TomOfSweden
(Edit) (Nov 17, 2007)
- Thanks for taking your time to read it. It was intentional not describing her feelings, since it's only about what goes on in his head and what he sees.
A large part of the story was about him dealing emotionally with that job. And the way he did it was to totally objectify his victims. This story is about where he gets reminded that one of them isn't. That's the horror.
I wanted to show how learning about reality can be threatening, if the only way you can function is by rejecting it.
I would love it if you went more into detail on what it was you liked about it, and what else if anything you didn't like, especially about the language and flow of it. Were the descriptions good?
Don't feel pressured. I'm just grateful you took this time alreadey
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MissPiss
(Edit) (Nov 17, 2007)
- You're very welcome. I knew it was your intention to focus on the mind of the main character. Sometimes i was just curious of what the victim thought, but that's just me. I liked your style of writing, it's clear, understandable, and i can actually see what's happening. And even though you didn't focus on the thoughts of the victim, you showed her pain and agony based on how you described how she collapse, cringes, etc. I really like your story overall.
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MissPiss
(Edit) (Nov 17, 2007)
- And yes, your descriptions were good. There's really nothing wrong with this story. Keep it up! :)
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