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Lapse in Judgment
Author: Captv8td
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(Added on Aug 16, 2007)
(This month 94395 readers) (Total 157666 readers) |
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One moment, Steve and Laura Packsworth were happily married suburbanites. The next moment, they belonged to the Chambeaux family. The adjustment is difficult for both of them as they endure one humiliating surprise after another. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 30, 2009 |
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I myself found the start rather tedious, you know, another poker game with too high a stake and the resulting debt, the sillyness of the 'contract'... plus, I'm not into male submissiveness.
Then there's the alternating between very descriptive scenes which are all of a sudden broken off and the tone becomes more general, as if the author didn't feel like going into details any longer.
All the time while reading, i was waiting for some action other than the standard fuck or the exploring of bodies, but the waiting was in vain, as predictable scene after forseeable 'twist' was passing the revue.
Okay, so Captv8td is a good, to very good writer with a vivid imagination. But to be honest, I found nothing of that in "Lapse In Judgment".
I have read a decently fair story, yes, but I have read thousands of those, and "Lapse" doesn't stick-out in any way.
Good, but that's all.
JJ (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
bobcatsky
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Feb 23, 2008 |
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GOOD JOB,KEEP THE CHAPTERS COMING. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Gentlemaster58
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Dec 25, 2007 |
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Can't wait for more, more, more. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Sep 16, 2007 |
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I think this was a good story, but you have too many typos to give it a better score. Cleaned up, I would have given it at least an 8. Personally, I would have preferred more humiliation and less enjoyment on the female slave's part--it was her husband's sin and she was forced into slavery so one would think she would be less excited. (Also, I could have done without the teenagers, too!) (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Sep 8, 2007 |
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An outstanding start to what could be a long tale. I'm anxious for each upcoming chapter. (10/10)
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msilsby
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Aug 29, 2007 |
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Great to see a fantastic author re-entering the scene after a long break. Always a pleasure to read. ***** (10/10)
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BrnFry
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Aug 23, 2007 |
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Great Story, I enjoyed the plot and the story has a great flow to it. I agree with "willman" only add humiliation. Hope to read more soon.
(10/10)
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| Reviewer:
willman
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Aug 21, 2007 |
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Very Erotic,with a food pace of development. The action draws you in without being just a stroke story. Keep the chapters coming and introduce punishment without making it over the top. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
fantazmaster
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Aug 19, 2007 |
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A very creative and unique storyline in this work here.Normally in these type of stories,the partner
in a m-f couple that commits the indiscretion pays the price of indiscretion.Here we have both the guilty husband and the indiscretion innocent wife
having to serve in order to payoff the husband's gambling debt.
The story is well written as the sequence of events flow smoothly as the story unfolds.The authour leaves plenty of "things to come" hints
in several places in the story.Hints tat leave me as a reader hoping for more chapters. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 19, 2007 |
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outstanding and different very enjoyable to read, hope you lan to add more (10/10)
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masterdw
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Aug 17, 2007 |
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Perfect. Please give us more. I am especially interested in seeing them humiliated and punished. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
foxeye1
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Aug 17, 2007 |
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Very well written, good story line and nice pace to it. Look forward to reading more, especially if our two slaves will be punished and tortured later on.
Thank you for your efforts. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
megfar
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Aug 16, 2007 |
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great story...i look forward to the rest of it (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Aug 16, 2007 |
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Excellent story love the gamble aspect. (7/10)
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