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Trouble!
Author: CarrieAnne
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(Added on Aug 5, 2007)
(This month 10225 readers) (Total 18718 readers) |
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Short but not sweet! Be careful who you are mean to on the 'net because payback is rough! |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Aug 8, 2007 |
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Quick and dirty, to use another phrase from the early days of computing. Could have used a little more description, maybe a touch more walking around in Elaine's mind during the torture, but not a bad little story. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Aug 11, 2007)
- Thanks chksng! I wanted to write a very short story that told the male's version of the story. I see a lot of stories told from the woman's viewpoint so I thought this would be different. I think I may add more chapters to this--other really short stories, fast and hot!
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| Reviewer:
Pussycat Sam
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Aug 7, 2007 |
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Hey CarrieAnne,
I really liked your story, it was an original idea which is rare these days to be honest. There's a lot of potential there for loads more detail though. Maybe you could consider adding more about how she's feeling during all this. Does she feel remorse for what she's been doing?
I would have liked to have had the guys making her apologise for teasing so many people and maybe they could have teased her so that she understood how it feels?
At the moment it reads like a synopsis for a longer story so maybe you could expand it at a later date?
Keep up the good work though.
Take care,
Love Sam.
xxx (5/10)
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- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Aug 7, 2007)
- The whole point of the story WAS that it was short but sweet ... well, at least sweet to the men and those watching. It was about the MEN not Elaine. They got their revenge...EOS. It seems a wee bit mean on your part to grade a story low when you warned it was short before you read it.
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Mad Lews
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Aug 6, 2007 |
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A great little vengeance tale, well done I maybe should have been a little more generous on the score but it was just felt too short, leaving me wanting more. (That's a good thing actually) Codes would be good, they aren't that hard to use. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Aug 6, 2007)
- LMAO I know, I know, but I was doped up on sinus meds when I submitted it and I forgot about the codes! I am going to add more little shorts to this ... other mean people at work! Thanks for the kind words.
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fantazmaster
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Aug 6, 2007 |
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A very well written and interesting story exploring the theme of online meets real lifei.
The author does an excellent job of taking the numerous ruses of Elaine,a accomplished online tease ,and detailing these ruses in a very concise format.These ruses of course set the stage for her payback at the hands of those she has teased.
I enjoyed the unique feature of her real life tormentors allowing online chat room members to remotely participate in her comeuppance . (9/10)
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- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Aug 6, 2007)
- Thanks! It had to be set back in the old days of Yahoo when they allowed people to set up their own rooms. Ahhh ... those were the days!
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