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Reunited
Author: Chris and Jen
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(Added on Jul 24, 2007)
(This month 9141 readers) (Total 12064 readers) |
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A story told from His and Her point of views. Promises of what they want to do to each other when they are reunited. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Kinkystudent
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Jul 24, 2007 |
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I like the content of the story but it is marred by the quality of the writing. Firstly there is no need to put POV at the beginning, and remove the interlude which says More Chris POV later... it's there now... we can see it. Now for the Biggy. I should really mark you down more for this. Grammar; You have to use paragraphs, they break up the text for the reader, I found myself getting lost. Also dialogue needs a new line, everytime.
I found the story good, it has potential, but sort out the grammar and check your spelling. (5/10)
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