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True Love
Author: Night Writer
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(Added on Jul 19, 2007)
(This month 25900 readers) (Total 54813 readers) |
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Blair has the perfect life - until she finds it spinning out of control. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Misschief
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Dec 20, 2008 |
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I loved this one.. One of My favorites, if not My favorite so far on this site.. (9/10)
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Tcheena3
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Aug 6, 2007 |
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Man-oh-man, I wish I could write like this!! Beautifully structured and gushing with sweet and nasty little ideas. I'm inclined to agree with Clevernick; second person present is not something I would normally read past the first paragraph... but this, well... (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Night Writer
(Edit) (Aug 7, 2007)
- Much too kind, Tcheena3, really. But I am glad some are making their way through to the end of this one. Never expected that. This was simply fun to write at the time, and brought back some good memories when I knocked the dust off. It means a lot that others are finding some enjoyment in it too. Thanks for reviewing. It's much appreciated.
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| Reviewer:
Clevernick
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Jul 30, 2007 |
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Excellent use of a very difficult idiom! As others have pointed out, 2nd person present is really hard to stay in. As a reader, I mean!
What did it for me was your use of detail and light touch -- your knowing roaming between the senses, bouncing back between the conscious and subconscious desires and the immediate sight, sound, smell and touch. I was never able to leave the story long enough to lose belief in it.
The absolute mastery of the domina works perfectly too. The drive to submit from desire alone is unusual, and yet also never loses my belief.
Identifying with a sub female doesn't come easy to me, but I couldn't find a single thing to complain about. Well done!
(10/10)
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Night Writer
(Edit) (Aug 1, 2007)
- Much appreciated, Clevernick. All that roaming and bouncing wasn't exactly premeditated - just instinctual, to break up the second person cliche a bit. Identifying with a sub female wasn't easy for me either, until I met one who inspired the story. Good Times.
I understand you're recently published - sincere congrats to you. Must be very satisfying.
Thanks again for the very kind review.
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mkemse
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Jul 30, 2007 |
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very well done enjoyable a nice change of pace (9/10)
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Night Writer
(Edit) (Aug 1, 2007)
- Thanks, mkemse - glad you enjoyed it.
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kamf1978
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Jul 30, 2007 |
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I seem to have missed this story when it first came out, but that only meant I was able to read more chapters in one go.
Fantastic story with great humiliation. I especially love the bits at the workplace. I can't wait for more from this author. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Night Writer
(Edit) (Aug 1, 2007)
- Thank you, kamf1978. The workplace bits were fun to write - my favorites as well. One more chapter to go...
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JimmyJump
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Jul 25, 2007 |
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This is another perfect example that shows it doesn't matter what subject you tackle. Cause what we have here, is a simple premise which has been used far more times than I care to count, even to the point of the subject getting boring...
That is where the skill of the author comes in, if indeed skill there is.
But as my opening sentence suggested, here is a writer who sure knows how to turn a beaten path into a grand avenue with flowerbeds and trees and the odd sprinkling fountain.
Like I said, it is not the subject that matters, but the way you bring it. And Mr. Night Writer did a splendid job at the latter.
"True Love" is far above the usual fodder and makes for some truly exiting reading.
You have my sincere thanks and admiration, Mr. Night Writer. I hope your Muse stays hungry for quite some time...
JJ (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Night Writer
(Edit) (Jul 26, 2007)
- Thank you very, very much, JJ. The single most satisfying reward for the sometimes hard work of writing is hearing that I've reached someone, that I've helped them imagine the flower beds and fountains (and the whips and chains) along the way.
As for my Muse, if she returns, I'll gladly make her squirm for a bite now and then.
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H Dean
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Jul 24, 2007 |
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After reading "Pershephone in Winter" I decided to have a look at this story. Not quite as good, due to some inconsistencies in voice and some structure oddities. Still, this story stands out quite well. Further, when one considers the difficulty of telling a story from this POV, it is even more of a standout. This is not an easy POV, though it did lend itself to an appropriately dream-like feel. Quite recommendable, very readable and very well done. (8/10)
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Night Writer
(Edit) (Jul 24, 2007)
- Well, you're being pretty generous here, but I do appreciate it. Still editing the rest, but it's painful. What was I thinking? Just feeding my hungry muse a bite here and there...
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H Dean
(Edit) (Jul 27, 2007)
- What were you thinking, you ask? Well, you were thinking "I can do this" and then later you were thinking "What the fuck was I thinking?" The worst of it is that you now have some wise ass telling you what you already knew.
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Night Writer
(Edit) (Jul 27, 2007)
- Looking back, it's a perfect example of why thinking with the little head isn't always such a great idea...
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Eponine
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Jul 21, 2007 |
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Wow! That was a great story!
Very impressive writing quality helps unfold a wonderful tale with a twist that caught me off guard and left me with a smile.
You built the story's layers perfectly atop one another, smoothly, with just the right balance between leaving the reader more and more suspended while simultaneously more and more informed.
(9/10)
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- Replied by:
Night Writer
(Edit) (Jul 22, 2007)
- Thanks, Eponine, glad you enjoyed it. I'm re-editing the remaining three chapters before submitting them. The first has always been the strongest, I think, but overall, the second person present POV has been maddening to redo. Never again, I promise!
-NW
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Cagemaster1000
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Jul 20, 2007 |
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It's a marvelous story, extremely well written, not in the conventional way... and even if is it quite short, it has everything necessary to make it more than an enjoyable reading.
Please continue with your work (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Night Writer
(Edit) (Jul 20, 2007)
- Thanks, Cagemaster1000 - glad you enjoyed it. Granted, it's short, but part 2 is on the way, submitted tonight. Things get much worse for our heroine - much, much worse.
-NW
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Snark
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Jul 20, 2007 |
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Nicely written, interesting twist. Dreams are frequently forgotten upon awakening but remain in the subconscious just the same. The first person, direct format, tends to interfere with (at least mine) the ability to become personally involved in the story. I'm NOT the person in the story, so telling me that I am immediately disconnects my ability to suspend disbelief. Your "Persephone", set in a conventional story format was absorbing and spectacular. I do enjoy your work and look forward to many more. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Night Writer
(Edit) (Jul 20, 2007)
- Thanks again for reading, Snark. Yep - I'm breaking the "second person" rule with this one, but it was written for (and to) a muse of mine, born of a series of e-conversations between us. It's a personal guilty pleasure, a homage to an old and very dear friend. A self-indulgence, I admit, but I thought some here might enjoy it nonetheless. And additional thanks for your appreciation of Persephone.
-NW
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TOXIS
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Jul 19, 2007 |
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What a wonderful story! The best tale that Blairbrek ever inspired. Sexy, nasty and short. Terrific end. Say there's more! Nice to see a great writer productive again. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Night Writer
(Edit) (Jul 20, 2007)
- Thanks, T. Your feedback is, as always, most respected and appreciated. There's more...
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