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Chillet week in hell
Author: Chris Schmid
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(Added on Jul 17, 2007)
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Chillet has been forced into a life as a bondage slave to a ruthless, demanding master. She undergoes torment after torment while she is slowly broken in and trained |
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Jul 18, 2007 |
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This is poorly conceived and poorly presented. The voice of this story does not work, largely due to the authors poor grasp of punctuation. I suspect this is a first time author who got extremely excited about his first story being completed; it apears rushed and as if there were no edits made.
*Chris, if you are serious about wanting to become a decent writer I suggest you visit the Writer's Block in the forum. A lot of valuable insight is there for the taking. It can be brutal, but it is always aimed at helping and improving writing skills. (1/10)
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mkemse
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Jul 18, 2007 |
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assoon as i can figure the story out i will
re rate it (2/10)
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cum girl
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Jul 17, 2007 |
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Chillet, Chilee, Chille ... what was her name again. Laughed all the way through. Hope you enjoyed writing it, I enjoyed reading it, a bit of light relief. Maybe you should think about spell checking your work for next time. Ps A Slave Registration Number is 3 didgets, hyphen, 3 didgets, hyphen, 3 didgets ... People who have them take them very, very seriously. (1/10)
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