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Death Wish
Author: Nialla
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(Added on Jul 17, 2007)
(This month 52329 readers) (Total 72688 readers) |
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A fantasy exploring the desire to be willingly tortured and killed, the ultimate submissive act. Would love to talk about this.. email me ? |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
HuManiMal
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Nov 19, 2011 |
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Good concept and narration, but technical is very weak. Good job in making short stories, as many do go on. Go over the technical writing, it will be a great story. (6/10)
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Doc_Odd
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Jan 24, 2011 |
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I also didn't think the use of caps in the end quite worked, but I love Nialla's fantasies generally, and usually my only issue is that they're too short. Nice to get a full length story. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Omega22
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Dec 4, 2010 |
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This story kinda reminds me performance by Gina Pane which really happened, but without death. (9/10)
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Polecat
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Jan 5, 2008 |
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Good story (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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Jul 23, 2007 |
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Good job Nialla -- a nice story with a guild arc and a ton of enthusiasm. If you wanted to improve it, I would suggest a smidge of reworking, some editing of technical errors (run ons, fragments, stuff like that) and a bit of work on the flow in the first section. Thank you for sharing! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
WyldWyl
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Jul 19, 2007 |
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Very enjoyable. Neatly descriptive, an interesting idea and an arousing look into the protagonists psychology, as in all your stories. The only criticism I would have is that going into all caps at the end kind of made it hard to read and broke the rhythm at a critical point. A minor annoyance that managed to mar the whole segment.
Other than that...great work! (8/10)
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mkemse
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Jul 18, 2007 |
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not realisitc unless someone has serious lfe concenrs not to many people i know would ponder something like this (5/10)
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- Replied by:
ElectricBadger
(Edit) (Jul 23, 2007)
- Well, no, but the story's about what it's about...codes are very clear on the snuff and all. Try to just focus on the writing :)
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