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Dare girl goes astray...
Author: niteowluk2003
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(Added on Jul 4, 2007)
(This month 60076 readers) (Total 75779 readers) |
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24 yr old female who loves sexual dares get more than she bargained for... |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Jul 11, 2007 |
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I generally agree with ElectricBadger's comments, except to add that the last half of the story (the final dare) was much better presented than the first half. It did NOT lack the details and emotions.
Edit: After chapters two and three were added, I gave up on this story. Two was like the start of One, and Three was worse. Score dropped from 7 to 4. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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Jul 5, 2007 |
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Thank you for posting this! There are some great ideas and scenarios, but the execution needs some work; it skips tense (the dare was to do...and that was how it went) and while it describes the facts of the scenarios, it lacks detail and emotions. Change this to a description of the events, instead of someone telling about them secondhand, and it'll be a great story! (5/10)
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