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The chamber maid
Author: the abbe
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(Added on May 26, 2007)
(This month 88087 readers) (Total 139594 readers) |
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Maggie finds thats slavery can be a choice. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
RiverOtter
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Nov 12, 2007 |
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As it is now, the grammar really isn't too bad, which is nice because the content of the story is quite enjoyable. (8/10)
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chksng19
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Nov 9, 2007 |
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After the second chapter was posted, the story improved; I now like it quite a bit. Hope there is more (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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Jun 4, 2007 |
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A really great story, with some great scenes. It could certainly use a grammar check, but at present the errors are only distracting -- it's still a very readable, enjoyable piece.
As mentioned, please have someone check it and resubmit the story, this is definitely a diamond in the rough! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
the Abbe
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2007)
- Thank you for the feed back. I have tried to go back and correct some of the grammer and tense changes. Hopefully there has been an improvement.
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 31, 2007 |
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fair to midland could have been better could have been weaker (5/10)
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- Replied by:
the Abbe
(Edit) (Jul 18, 2007)
- Fair, but what do you think would make it better?
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| Reviewer:
GuiltyKarma
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May 28, 2007 |
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Excellent start! Although i agree with Snark-it needs a LOT of editing work. Don't get discouraged, but find an editor and keep on writing!
___GuiltyKarma (7/10)
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- Replied by:
the Abbe
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2007)
- Any thoughts on where to find an editor? As you can tell I'm relatively new to this.
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| Reviewer:
Snark
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May 26, 2007 |
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Actually, it's not really mediocre, but I've tried 3 times to read this...but with the changes of tense, incorrect words, wrong punctuation, left out words and other errors I haven't bothered to document, this thing is a mess. The author has obviously spent a LOT of time on it. PLEASE have it proof read by someone who understands English and re-submit it. I'd like to be able to read it. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
the Abbe
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2007)
- Brutal but honest and accurate. It writes in your head better then it does on the computer. Some of its bad typing, and some of its just trying to relearn english from a long time ago. I've gone back and tried to correct as much as I could find. Hopefully you have found the latter postings showing improvement.
Thank you for the feed back.
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